This chapter is just absolute CRAP! You have actually made me angry. This is almost exactly the same as Muggle-born conspiracy. At least before the similarities could be over looked but this is just too much.
ch 54 Ch. 54 Broom and Incident
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Just a tip. Women do not like people to rub there hair unless they are planning on making it more beautiful in some way. No girl, no matter the age would put up with that. Glowers would be the least of your problems. Remember, women are the dangerous ***. LOL!
ch 49 Ch. 49 Hogwarts Abuzz
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The fight was once again great. I do worry about how this will effect the relationship of the three present as there friendship was born of this experience. Also this was a moment that showed Ron that listening to Hermione's advice was a good thing.
ch 48 Ch. 48 Trolls are Overrated
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Cool! I did not know that. Thank you for sharing. : )
ch 38 Ch. 38 Training to Hogwarts
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True. Hopefully Author can do something different this time then.
ch 27 Ch. 27 Heir Bones
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Great article, read true. Also been meaning to tell you i love the way he is with Susan I just wish you could get your terms right. I think your character needs to decide once and for all if she is his sister or cousin. Maybe make it legal even. Another thought I had is that I hope a few of his teachers go to the opening of his shop in support. Especially Dumbledore.
ch 43 Ch. 43 Paper and Train
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Just wondering how you are going to progress from here since it was stated in your talk with Mr. & Mrs. Death that you were not to interfere with the fate of major players. Harry is supposed to gain a lot of confidence in his own abilities too lead others because of Umbridge.
ch 42 Ch. 42 Unexpected Meetings
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How do you know how powerful other people's magic cores are? You can't see them. Also, I don't believe some people would feel the need to push theirs beyond what they are comfortable using.
ch 41 Ch. 41 Final Preparations
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Maybe in the future he could look into starting a elementary/primary school for the magical world. I haven't seen anybody else do that yet! Hopefully it wouldn't have houses so the children would be free to make friends with anyone. It wouldn't need to be exactly the same as muggle school but some basic's would make sense. Just food for thought.
ch 38 Ch. 38 Training to Hogwarts
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I thought that before Victoria's mum got hurt that her family life was ok???
ch 35 Ch. 35 Worry and Joy
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I would like to see someone create a relationship for Amelia. I know she was left with a child (or in this case children) as well as an important job to do but that doesn't explain why she cant have a private life.
ch 27 Ch. 27 Heir Bones
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Everyone seems to forget that witches and wizards have double the life span of muggles so in-turn age much slower. Someone who is in their 60's for example should looked to be only in there 30's-40's depending on their own genetics and magical ability. It is why it also confuses me why so many of them get married and have children so early. If everyone remembers it is stated that James Potters parents were considered very old when they had him.
ch 25 Ch. 25 Twelve People pt.1
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Love that idea! Hopefully Geri turns into a good character.
ch 23 Ch. 23 Greyback
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Oh, I almost forgot! Where is Sol???
ch 14 Ch. 14 Family and a train
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I love how you wrote Tonks. I think it came across as very true to her character.
ch 14 Ch. 14 Family and a train
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Amelia had no right to give Tory permission to go to that trial. She is in no way her parent or guardian. Tory is just a visitor to her home. Nothing formal has ever been done about Tory's home life to take her fathers rights away regarding her. I don't think her father would have let her go. The chapter would have been better if Aaden just planned to take Tory without consulting his aunt. Then Amelia could have disapproved without having time to rectify the situation.
ch 55 Ch. 55 Shaking the Ministry
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