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Salvatore_LeVota
male LV 4I am a skilled professional artist and a amateur comic writer. Hopefully one day both will merge.
2020-05-10 Joined United StatesBadges 15
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I dunno this intro to me just needs some rearranging for some reason. The intro is kind of cliche how many stories start with that beginning “It was a cold winter night…” maybe I dunno try and do more descriptive intro. Diving into the image of the city your conveying.
It was a cold winter night in one of the cities present in the northern hemisphere of the Earth, a relatively impoverished place by world standards.
Taking the Mafia to the Magic World
Fantasy · RVN_1998
I don’t think whirlpools can touch the sky?
He slowly turned his head back in order to see what was happening when he found 3 giant whirlpools that were practically touching the sky laid in front of them.
My Pirate System
Fantasy · 1st_Manga_KING
Do I really need to be reminded he’s a slave to Neph? That has been established we don’t need a reminder.
Firstly, he was now at the mercy of another person. Despite the fact that his master was lost in another world with very low chances of ever making it back, Sunny felt that they were fated to meet again.
Shadow Slave
Fantasy · Guiltythree
You may be using realization too much in these next two sentences. Just thought you should know. 👍
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Blood Legacy: New World Of Doom
Fantasy · Arkinslize
Rishe not Vishe
Frowning, Vishe eventually found his mark.
Born in Blood
Fantasy · CovidCandy