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Like to read and with a good story is it too hard to stop. So when the story is fresh my sleep doesn't excist.

2020-05-11 Joined Netherlands

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"removed his read" removed his head*

Mira didn't want to use any more Qi or her Ice Dao as she was running out of energy. All that was left was her body and scythe. There were only about 10 remaining Qi Condensation Realm bandits. Mira charged towards one and swiftly removed his read. It wouldn't have been that easy if their morale hadn't dropped and they felt like they had no chance of defeating her. She continued removing their heads until the last guy. This guy actually managed to block her attack. The bandit tried his best but was still, but one could say that his inevitable death was much worse. Mira removed his right hand in their battle, then removed his left arm. She then chopped him in half at the waist and left him to slowly die on the ground. She had to go chase some of the other bandits to prevent them from escaping.

Immortal Ice Empress: Path to Vengeance

Immortal Ice Empress: Path to Vengeance

Fantasy · Dreyerboys

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Wasn't Minos in the Snow Kingdom?

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The Rise of the Black Plain

The Rise of the Black Plain

Fantasy · RVN_1998

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Thanks for making it more clear, was a bit confusing.

Author's Note: I said that the attacks on other regions couldn't start before at least five years had gone by. That was a mistake. I already fixed that in the rules' explaining chapter. It was supposed to be ten years. Sorry for the mistake.

Death... and me

Death... and me

Fantasy · Suiyan

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I didn't like it when Sunkan got destroyed. I think bringing it permanently back is a bad idea. But you can consider having it as a instance like alternate event. One where they can't stay forever but allow them to see friends and family still alive even when they aren't in there own timeline. so something like temperaly continu where the destruction did not happened so the story can continu the story. But they can't stay there and when they have to leave the twins of there get merged with the twins off now and cease to live there after they return, but not forgetten. It gives a better end but still it isn't their place to be. You can decide to ressurect people fully or partly but with this grand story I don't think it fits well. Like there parents they can't get super old and strong so it is nice to see them again but don't think getting them back is helpful. Talking for a bit could give closure and if you bring someone back be selective that it is logical or they have potential to be meaningful for the story.

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Death... and me

Death... and me

Fantasy · Suiyan

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