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Did you read my whole comment. I wrote this does not line up with the dumbledore YOU have portrayed in this book. In the original book figg didn’t tell dumbledore much because she didn’t see what was happening in the house she could only suspect from the way he looked. dumbledore in the original book was a little dark and didn’t care as long as the his plan was done. But you have portrayed your dumbledore to be a saint then out of nowhere you are saying He knew everything. The original didn’t know everything only suspected.

Dumbledore can’t say no it’s not his choice he is not a legal guardian of Harry. Harry was his ward as he is a orphan but that went away when Sirius got released. And your saying dumbledore knew of the abuse and did nothing or even try to help him. This in not the dumbledore you portray in this book. Very poor writing on this chapter

So the mc is so weak now he can’t even see bullets coming. He can fight kiado and survive but normal bullets catch him lacking. There is no consistancy in this book. I swear you make it up as you go. There is Cleary no pre planned story line

So is this a sanji fan fic now. Are you going to just add another reincarnater to the crew when ever you want.

Can you make the chapters a bit longer.

Im starting to think that the author of this book has a unhealthy obsession with 11 and 12 year olds. No 12 year old is the hottest girl in ravenclaw. And the mc is in his first year so why are you calling him “hot” and saying older girls are jelous of cho. This book is uncomfortable to read and doesn’t make sense. If there is one more chapter about hot underage minors I think I’m gonna report this book for pedophilia.

Just letting you know that 11 year olds don’t flirt with each other. That is just weird and why would older students care. Are they all pedophiles or something.

Boring chapter. Stop breaking into haki monalogs during a fight.

5 chapters for a no name nothing fight that has no point in the contex of the story. What a waste of my time reading it.

Why is the mc still strugglin against these weaklings but managed to almost beat queen months ago. You said since the queen fight he is going to use his stongest attacks from the start but he isn’t at all. Can you please stop making him struggle against no name characters for no other reason but filler. And then you drag that same boring no name fight out for 3 chapters. Boring

How can he beat queen worth almost 1 billion but struggles with 2 nobodies worth 200 million berries. This novel makes no sense

That was a boring info dump chapter.

I don’t like it when one piece fan fics explain conquerors haki. We are all fans of one piece we all know what haki is or we wouldnt be reading a fan fic of it would we.

I’m not a big fan of dropping books but I have to drop this one. The mc is pathetic. The “traits” you gave him only seem to work sometimes. He isn’t brave and he isn’t smart. He’s not even clumsy. He is a coward. And now he has to do everything Nami tells him to do like a slave. No Thankyou I don’t read books where the mc is a slave what’s the point you may aswell make nami the mc.

What happened to his “brave” trait. He is running away

I thought he was suppose to be training. He just runs away from everything. He doesn’ try at all to learn anything

Looking for info. Buying it if bounty hunters. There are a lot of way. You said yourself they had a photo of pride somehow without him knowing even though Morgan is not alive yet but they still had the info. Maybe for him to make a minimal effort to actually find the person who wiped out his island. Maybe he should have atleast a little idea of where he was going or what he is doing. conquerors haki work off will and determination to never give up your dream. But the mc doesn’ have a dream to fight for so how does he even have it.

I think I figured out why I find this book so frustrating. He keeps accidently falling into fights. He never plans or looks forward. He never finds someone to challenge or succeed in one of his plans. He just sails get stuck on a island trains then leaves and accidently meets someone strong. Barely survives, then leaves and finds a new island. Rinse and repeat