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I believe that this novel has some potential but I’m not going to be going along for the ride anymore. I just can’t describe exactly how annoying the development of the characters is. The children of the story feel so lifeless and joyless, like the author doesn’t know how to write compelling young characters. Why is everyone so dead? Absolutely no distinct traits of the main characters in the beginning of the story and not much reason to stay around and see them fleshed out when there is not any development so far. The story harps on the idea that Max and Nico are super mature and talented, yet I don’t think that at all, instead they feel robotic, like androids imitating human behavior. I can’t imagine these being real people, and I just feel incredibly confused at how the background of the society works so that children are so willing to jump through fire and war to do what? For what purpose? I don’t know, but with how much the author narrates instead of showing dialogue between max and nico, you would assume that max never talks and cannot talk period. Again, decent writing but bad characters and story development.

This book has very few redeeming qualities in my eyes. The writing is laughable, in spite of an "editor". The first chapter makes me physically ill to read, with many grammar and spelling mistakes. The word choice is terrible. After you get past the writing quality, you see a story that is pretty on par for a novel on this website. Average at best, boring and strange at worst. I read around 50 chapters of this a while back, and gave it another chance and read the first 50 chapters again. My opinion still has not changed, proving to myself that I am not insane by skipping out on this novel and instead making me question the sanity of those still reading this. This is not an indictment of the story as a whole, but the beginning of the novel is the most important part. It needs the most care and attention compared to any other part of the novel. The intro of this novel should be thrown in the trash and rewritten, if the author were to appeal to a wider audience. If not then just continue adding on to the story that has been made and know that no new readers will show up.

Extremely derivative and bland background for the story. I couldn’t finish even the 5th chapter because it constantly tries to copy Solo Leveling or other more original power fantasy leveling novels. Writing quality is not good to say the least. At some points making it feel like a badly translated clone of Solo Leveling, which I could at least tolerate if I liked the premise and thought it could change to be different in an aspect from the standard. However; it does not deviate from the formula and could use an editor and much better introduction that can get the reader to stay for the development of the characters and storyline. As it is, the idea is uninspired and the writing is worse. For context, I immediately dropped any desire to read further after the decision to pick the daggers for the hunter test. Especially after the detail about the shadow making me think that this was just a Solo leveling fanfic.