Donald_Miller_7726

4mth

Replied to Doubleline

But it also said “ 5 days earlier” right after that so I think it was a flash forward type of thing

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Void Evolution System

Fantasy · Crocs_is_Dead

Donald_Miller_7726

4mth

Commented

Idk if I missed something but is it supposed to be the 180 sec timer?

I tried to touch the notification that began a 60-second countdown, but my hand passed through it, almost like the notification was non-existent.

Earth's Alpha Prime

Fantasy · MN_1223

Donald_Miller_7726

4mth

Posted

This book started out great for the first 18 chapters but then the author just completely forgets that his MC is built to be a loner, he doesn’t like socializing? Make him run into a group trying to take his loot and have him invite them to join him 3 days later. loses his partner that he didn’t really trust to much? Give him someone he seems to trust entirely to much based on the fact that they went to school together even though they never talked or had much contact. He’s supposed to be this dark and brutal guy? Make him start opening up to the first female he meets even though she is already bitching about following simple orders. If you could improve the grammar I would be willing to look past some of the other things but you took a great premise for an MC and tried to switch his personality right after you established it. It’s almost like someone else started writing or translating the novel 18 chapters in.