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You don't need to address it for my sake or anyone's really, it's not even a problem depending on how you view it from a casual viewpoint or a viewpoint from someone who's read alot so they've seen more so they give more constructive criticism, or straight up hate lol. Well I said SDS depending if that's changed in this time period, but there are alternate options to watching it, or even reading the manga(recommended it's good). Sorry if you've viewed what I've said with hostility, was not my intentions, and it's not my place to give constructive criticism to someone who hasn't asked for it either.

Literally not trying to argue with you, just stating on my viewpoints whole coming to understand yours, but you won't understand mine. What happened about the Seven Deadly Sins world? Are you going to add that? It's underappreciated.

I've actually come to understand your reasons, and your viewpoint.

1. I viewed it from a logical viewpoint where the mc isn't absolute. (4.) 2. She didn't need him, he was a preferable choice. 3. No comment. 4. I'd say equal grounds because with his lack of information about the contract, she could've easily fooled him. 5. The same guy who is presented as logical, the same guy who would not fight back against someone stronger than him because he would have no chance of winning. (Chapter 47-48)

If you actually read all my other comments I've already addressed on how I felt it was executed. When you see partnership you don't think of soul bonding lol, you think of working together to further their goals. I'm not meaning to antagonize you. In the novel I don't believe it was mentioned that you can break it, only in the comments when you commented it when talking to me.

Argument? Sorry if you've seen it that way, but I was trying to present things on how I've viewed it. I have told you actually in multiple comments about the way it was executed, even one saying how I was a little dissatisfied.

You know what her character is going to amount to, I don't. So when you introduce her and bond her all in one chapter, it's going to get viewed as whimsical writing. Argument? I'm literally giving my viewpoints on your story on how I've comprehended it.

If you would read my other comments it wasn't just about the partnership, it was about how you presented him as a character throughout the story, and how she in all in one chapter was introduced then partnership with him all in one chapter. Do I care if he has a partner? No I honestly don't, it was just how it was executed lol.

It's not about me being right lol, it's about me trying to get you to understand my viewpoint even if a little.

I didn't mean eternally bonded like a marriage contract, I said it like that to emphasis the forever bond by contract, partnership. Which I take it like that eternally considering her friend said you can't break it or something along the lines.

If you're understanding you would be able to understand my view as a reader. You can present your character as a logical, thinker type which is by all means fine, what is not fine is the way it was executed. He doesn't know her or anything about her before the partnership, he met her once before that happened. So to introduce her in the same chapter as you bond him with her feels rushed. Like you said I don't know what you have planned for her, it's because I don't know anything about her, and her to be hastly rushed into a partnership with the mc without knowing the role she plays makes it feels like she's there by whimsical writing.

Nitpicking small details that I found contradictory while providing constructive criticism. Am I mad? No. Am I a little dissatisfied from how it was executed? Yes. Are you going to try to understand my view point as a reader? Probably not. All in one chapter he meets her for the second time, and just precedes to eternally bound to each other. Which by the way I'm okay with, just not how it was done.

How is he restrained in anyway, I don't know the whole soul bonding thing, that is unbreakable. Do I really care if he is bonded like that? The answer is no. Do I care how it happened? Yes. Met her for the second time in his life then precedes to a partnership bond that is unbreakable. You presented him as a logical, and thinker type of character, introverted. There was not build up or getting to know the character he was bonding with before hand, and him bonding with her right away felt rushed and forced, and poorly executed. Not to mention contradictory to the character you presented. Am I mad? No. Am I a little dissatisfied? Yes. Are you going to be read this and try to understand my point of view? Probably not lol.

Yes only one giving constructive criticism (complainting), while also the only pointing out the flaws in your story so you can improve your story if you so wish to.

I don't really have a problem with it either, but before that you monologued about him wanting to unrestrained. The way you presented your character throughout the story leading to that moment is contradictory, and the reason on why I'm nitpicking. Yes I could have continued reading along the story without commenting, I could, but I also could present my view point on your story, and provide constructive criticism so you can see your flaws in your story, and strive to write a more solid story, or you can just ignore what I've commented and the reasons for why I felt this way.

"I did it because I wanted to try it", lol ok. Yes I don't know her role, and importance or what you have planned for her considering she was so hastly added because you wanted to, and it's because I don't know what you have planned that I'm nitpicking. You would think he as someone who presents himself as logical, and a thinker by you wouldn't readily agree to a partnership this is binding, for literally forever. Only nitpicking because it felt so forced, and very rushed.

I don't know maybe the whole soul partnership thing, hub almost like it's a contract, and contracts in a logical view point are restraining/binding. I do like this, just think it was poorly executed, it literally all happened in one chapter with no prior foreshadowing, or build up. Just meeting then eternally bound together in one chapter.

All I did was point out how he is restrained, contradictory to when you monologued about him not wanting to be restrained. Of course there is going to be some annoyance, if I truly disliked this fanfiction I would've tossed it like any other that wasn't worth the time. Just nitpicking.

Reading it because I honestly do have hopes for it, and it is well written compared to the other stuff on this site lol.

Don't see any reason for her character at all, there was no build up for her character you just threw her into the story, and whimsically bonded her with the main character (ironically before a monologue about not wanting to be restrained). It's very annoying having actual hopes for a fanfiction just to get let down. He literally doesn't even know her, met her once before the bonding, literally once. Then precedes to do an inreversible bond, whimsical writing at best, even lazy.