thats what was bothering me. You clearly wrote emir with flaw , but I just dont feel them in any fight . He never make any mistake with his Time ability , can responsable to any situation with is ability (can fight long , close range , now he can even protect himself). Lack of experience ? he can bypass this with his ability, . He's often "close to death" but I never feels as if he can lose à fight. He just feel too strong and perfect in the way he fight. Thats just the impression he is giving me. And his lack of "personality?" with his lack of any error make him just feel like an inorganic being.I just dont have any attachement to him. Actually the scenes that i like the most are the on with his family , when they are some devellopement for him.
ch 111 Spell Weaver II
Fantasy · GoldenStache
I finally understand what bother me so much with this novel, I never feel like there is a danger , i never feel atached to any character , Émir feel just to perfect no mistake in any action , no hésitation just power blazing any obstacle. after so many chap I finally know why I can't get into it . Émir just feel inorganic ,à perfect being with anecdotic flaw who tremple any opposent
ch 111 Spell Weaver II
Fantasy · GoldenStache
The man was a humanoid bunny. He was 2 meters tall, had pink fur, wore an eyepatch, and smoked a cigar. His rogue appearance, coupled with his frown and bulging muscles, made him stick out from the group.
Sci-fi · TheCringeGuy
"Name, Class, and Power Level?"
Sci-fi · TheCringeGuy
like him ?
He set Elwin down onto a safe spot on the falcon's nest. Elwin tiptoed to peer his head above the wooden railing, his tangerine, cream-colored hair fluttering in the wind.
Fantasy · Toshinori_Heiichi
A hypocrite ineed after all isn't he just like Arthur a pawn in the order's hands
ch 91 Awoken From Lies
Fantasy · GoldenStache
See ? Another convenient , maybe some god of charm bless the MC ?
Without further ado, the owner reluctantly agreed to my terms, and I handed him the money. As he scurried away, I felt my laughter rising within me, unchecked and unhinged.
Fantasy · QTV
why it is so easy à complete stranger comme to you saying sweet things and poof à connection is created. Its just feel way to easy for the MC till now how he gain the sword was easy , how he gain the thief was easy. I will continue with 5 or 6 chapters but it just feel way too convenient for now
As he inspected it, a maniacal laugh erupted from him. "Alright, this is going to be fun! I'm in. Those greedy nobles are going to go insane once it spreads. So why do you need me?"
Fantasy · QTV
It just feel forced , you cant vient him as your savior when your survival is due to luck and when they had à chance to win without this plan. And just why ? why doesn't he just escape with his team this plan was just to dangerous when you can just prepare à secret escape route
"But that leader wanted to claim my rewards, while these were innocent and fought following every order, even if it cost them their lives. For this, I won't kill them," Lucius explained as he opened the door of the shaman's house and closed it behind him. Deep down, he felt a bit of sorrow as he saw their faces, but on the other hand, he was also their savior.
Fantasy · Crown_Nyx
why ? Sword and shield is just better even if you don't know how to use the shield just discard it and you have a sword and a shield that can be of use.
["You have picked the longsword," the voice confirmed, its tone resolute].
Fantasy · Crown_Nyx
S you can gain à sigil by eating à sigil bearer
ch 38 Me, Myself, and Dreams
Action · Broken_Saint
now that I think about it , I was thinking maybe his sigil is too overpowered, but if he need 1 month for recover it's balanced
The Philosopher. Sounds like a Sigil for thinking and learning. It most certainly is not. But with how much Wyatt gets hurt, it definitely gets him thinking. Thinking about pain and suffering. Especially when the most potent ability from his Sigil basically cripples him for a month. It's already been around two weeks since he was initially hurt by that ability. I wonder how much longer it will take until he fully recovers.
Action · Broken_Saint
Hope he learn something frome this
Billy shrugged, "Well, when things are too easy, they get boring. By acting dumb, I introduce an element of unpredictability, of chaos. It's far more exciting, don't you think?"
Action · IEatTurtles
As a reader, i dont understand the point of making your MC undefeatable .If you can't lose what s the meaning of a fight or struggle ?
David watched the scene unfold from the sidelines, his mind churning. The arrogant attitude of Hotshot reminded him of the countless scenarios he had written where Enryu's peculiar ability came into play. The power of Adaptation, a skill that was borderline unfair. It allowed Enryu to grow stronger with each conflict, to learn and adapt from every hardship. The battles he lost only served to make him stronger for the next. It was an ability he'd designed specifically for his protagonist, making Enryu virtually unbeatable in the long run.
Action · IEatTurtles
Revamp 1 novel with more than 500 chap, gulp. Hope that you will be able to make a story you can be proud of . Best of luck
ch 534 CHPT 534: To Experience In Power
Fantasy · _Avatar0FFury_
Love - Stamina of the host will increase and the Intelligence of the host will decrease dramatically.
Fantasy · Emberlight
where is the next chapter ?
ch 360 4.20.2 Heavy problem.
Fantasy · GoGo
Your whole existence is a lie
"Me an AI?... Hah!" Alfin laughed, but the words that Lakyus said shook him to the very core. But then he recalled his past, the older life and his reincarnation. Which solidified his belief.
Fantasy · GoGo
there is something that bothers me with Emir, something that means that I cannot just hang on with him, he was created with the aim of being a weapon and has been training since his birth, therefore his mind and his abilities are justified. Maybe it comes from his opponents just not being strong enough, or something else. I just have the impression that they can overpower anything at this point, look at the fight with the salamander it's what you could call a close fight but yet I never had the impression that he was going to lose. Maybe that's just it, I don't feel like he can lose?
ch 111 Spell Weaver II
OLD-WORLD EXTRA
Fantasy · GoldenStache