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I'm utterly impressed at the complete inability to use the same name for a single character across multiple chapters. Kaiya, Kayla, Kiera. Peter, Pete. Keith, Casey. Presley, Prescott. I'm sure there's others in missing but you need to go back and fix this. How is a reader supposed to fully engage in a story when the characters names won't follow any consistency?
ch 107 We're Done
Apocalypse - World Traverse System
Sci-fi · AllenWorker
Go8ng back to my previous comment regarding rifle ammunition in a handgun, the caliber you listed is literally for the M16
Currently, he had a handgun with 10 bullets and an M16 rifle without ammunition.
Apocalypse - World Traverse System
Sci-fi · AllenWorker
Please enlightened me as to what handgun model would be chambered in a rifle caliber.
In front of Seth, a projection appeared showing an inventory, which contained the following items: [Chainsaw (Second World)], [Handgun (Second World)], [Machete (Second World)], [5.56 Caliber Bullets*13 (Second World)], [Dog Leash SM Set], [Apparel (Apocalypse)], [Watch (Apocalypse)], [Homemade Spear (Apocalypse)].
Apocalypse - World Traverse System
Sci-fi · AllenWorker
Highly disappointing. Months of waiting for a subpar, expedited ending.
ch 154 The Ending, The beginning
Stealing The Protagonist’s Yandere Lovers
Fantasy · Sheizzcoldasice
1/4th of a second is a quarter second
"You, why are you in my room ?" She pointed her sword at me in less than 1/4th part of a second.
Reincarnated with the Mind Control Powers in Another World.
Fantasy · Night_phantom
Tell you what, I have far too much free time, and I see potential in this. If you are willing, I can start reading this all over again and leave corrective paragraph comments where they are needed. It will be your choice to use them. Just let me know if you'd want essentially a free editor.
ch 171 170. I Am Man, Pretending To Be a Man, Disguise As Another Man V
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
"So you're not going to do it? Okay, I will find someone else to do it. Have a good day, Madam Gayler." Grammar and punctuation structured correctly
"So you not gonna do it? Okay, I will find someone else to do it, Have a good day Madam Gayler."
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
he experienced it first hand grammar correction
He knew she can't be blamed for it, She can't control this nature of hers, As he first-hand experienced it with his Sage's heart, So he needs to teach her how to control it before putting his plan into action.
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
, but if she's like this, punctuation and grammar correction
This is why Alex needs to tame here, Not only because of Nathan, There might be other protagonists he needs to deal with, But if she likes this then it's pretty much impossible for him to manage it.
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
You are consistently using a comma where a period should be. A comma is a pause in a sentence or break in one consistent sentence, whereas a period ends that sentence. Every author is able to return and edit their published chapters. Therefore, I recommend correcting the punctuation. Grammar can be fixed later.
ch 171 170. I Am Man, Pretending To Be a Man, Disguise As Another Man V
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
chapters continue to release yet this one remains unfixed. removing from my list
ch 0 3 Entering the Academy - Chapter 2
The Main Heroines are Trying to Kill Me
Anime & Comics · mtlnovel
literally the third chapter in and there's a major uploading error. I'll be back when you actually fix it
ch 0 3 Entering the Academy - Chapter 2
The Main Heroines are Trying to Kill Me
Anime & Comics · mtlnovel
Reverse world or not, the basic concept of speech and phrases doesn't change. Couple with the flipping of general words and consisted misspellings, this is becoming harder to read by the paragraph.
Rebecca sees him as this regret. She judged him like he was green tea like before but she should have been clear after that song. He was not a gold miner, He is just a guy too ignorant of how his actions are seen in other's eyes.
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
digger. the phrase is gold digger
Rebecca sees him as this regret. She judged him like he was green tea like before but she should have been clear after that song. He was not a gold miner, He is just a guy too ignorant of how his actions are seen in other's eyes.
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
200x5=1000 not 800
The host has Vaginal and Anal sex with Isabella and Amara (Anal) (200× 5= 800 RP)...
Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
Urban · ForManaga
thins
Because it thinners the conscience of a person and makes judgments clouded.
Erotic RPG: I am in the Game world, But My Heroines are Villainesses
Fantasy · Darkness_Enjoyer
Sentence structure, paragraph design, and grammar are all poor quality. The author switches between first - and third-person perspective, seemingly, every other sentence. This amplifies the grammatical errors while emphasizing the author inexperience in writing. Characters are non-relatable because there is no progressive development. To sum up the story; dude dies, wakes up in a video game as a noble, screws anything that crosses his path, the end.
I've been reborn as a villain in an erotic game
Fantasy · Roni_Sarker