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The story itself is quite good. The Tang San in this story can think critically, isn't perverted, and is following a unique path that isn't just cave man smash. Other characters in the story are also developed quite well, except the other transmigrators, some of whom are quite dumb. The translation is not up to par. There are many mistakes littered throughout the chapters, like wrong soul levels, pronouns, the names of the characters switching from Chinese to literal English etc. The translator probably does not put much effort into the work, the editing is not good, and they still ask for money lol.

Did I do a good job? It's my first time acting out this role, but I don't think I have a future in this career.

Good idea, poor execution. Pros: - The Gacha started nice, with competent but not overly powerful gains, giving him the power to survive mundane threats. - Attention to little details like how having taskmaster's aptitude and mimicry would change his balance and gait, revealing him as unordinary. Cons: - Started in Gotham again. It's a city that's suffering from a warlock's curse, not transmigration and reincarnation central. - The story lacks proper emotional expression, from both the MC and the other characters. It's only got sentences that states what they are feeling bluntly and adjectives set a tone that is never properly explored. - Plot points lack proper foreshadowing and build up. Like the league of shadows suddenly attacking the MC. It would be fine if there was a paragraph of events leading up to that point afterwards or may snippets, but no, the author just put in a note saying that the league was watching batman for a while. - Too many powerful entities are interacting with the MC, creating a dissonance with the setting. - The MC's personality is bland. He's got traits like being calm but that's it. No proper motivation beyond surviving to be found. But this is early on in the story, so this can change. These are just a few points and critics. The author can improve upon these, making it null. If the author decides to give high intellect to the MC, be aware of mundane plots and situations that this intelligence can help prevent, because judging from the current material, I highly doubt the author can write a proper genius MC.

Reading to C37, the story is mostly alright. There are just some parts that just kinda makes the story more disappointing. The MC's behaviour is kinda awkward. There were couple of snippets that hints at something like trauma, and then it's just glazed over, not mentioned again. Furthermore, she has a sense of self-preservation, hates pain, and stuff like that but continues to act silly even though she should have learned from what got her into the painful messes she was in, instead of doing stupid things because she is bored or insane, especially when she can show logical lines of thought and show control on her murder impulse. The whole fight scene with Dynamite looks like the author is trying to stuff something he likes into the fic without really thinking it through. Like you would think from what has been shown so far, the MC would play around a lot with her kagune, but she tries to punch him. Like she has a supernaturally tough, strong and versatile weapon to use, but gets beaten because she does not have 'form', something for normal humans that does not have supernatural weapons, speed, or strength. However, this is just something I personally don't like, so just chalk it up to her being stupid or something. What killed it for me was the torture scene and the subsequent fight. It's not that gory or gives the reader discomfort. It just came out of nowhere. Well, it came from Tokyo Ghoul, this is just a knock-off version. For the life of me, I could not see anything interesting or exciting, it was just kinda bland. It feels like slapping a piece of wood onto a painting and then call it character development. Boring and dysfunctional. Now, there are good parts. The author did not start of in Brockton Bay, and started in a different city with new heroes, villains and background characters. That's already pretty good. He also fleshes them out quite well, to the extent that I kinda like them more than the MC... maybe that's not a good thing. The gore and blood also appeals to my inner murder hobo. Overall, solid fic, just held back by the MC for me. If you want a happy-go-murder kinda MC this one is for you. The plot direction is kinda loose to none-existent up to C37, but this maybe because I have not read far enough. Still, great job author.