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Thankfully enough, the data from previous experiments are secure since they were recorded using the memory crystals. I added a name to the crystals cause I felt calling them just crystals isn't fantasy esque and they needed a name that literal entails what they do.

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Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Most recent instead of "new" to avoid redundancy in the sentence.

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Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Or even better: Swine Tumor!

Its flesh has now turned a sickly green, akin to those afflicted with the Devil's Delusion.

Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Look what I found: Boar Delirium!

Its flesh has now turned a sickly green, akin to those afflicted with the Devil's Delusion.

Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Is there suppose to be a "they" between "little" and "see"?

It's truly a shame how little see things from my point of view, my fellow peers confining themselves in their ivory towers of so-called integrity and honor.

Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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An arm has long since fallen to the ground with a loud thud, splashing water onto my robes and disturbing my line of thought.

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Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Is there a need for the first "original"?

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Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Use one description or the other.

There's a dripping of water or sewage along the walls, the tunnels above must be leaking once again.

Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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Isn't subject a better word than project in this situation?

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Method to the Madness

Method to the Madness

Horror · Cloakedinshadow

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"they could wound each other quite badly"

Silence settled between the two of them. Their mana, rising slowly from their bodies and sharpening their swords. Even though they didn't add the intent to kill in their sword, it didn't mean that it wasn't dangerous. At the very least they could wound themselves quite badly. 

SON OF THE HERO KING (Terminated the contract on WN read the synopsis)

SON OF THE HERO KING (Terminated the contract on WN read the synopsis)

Fantasy · HIKARU_GENJI

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