Don't you dare atop here 😤 ....
I'm blazing through this whole novel tn... THIS IS THE SHIT!!!!
I haven't even started reading and already you are making me itch to get started. 😭[img=recommend]
I have to say that expanding your POV into 3rd person will certainly help with fleshing our the world toy have built. And personally, not being so entwined with just Yuuta's emotions will increase the thoughtfulness of the story as a whole. As for the various subplots, you could honestly talk about the zareth story at the beginning of the nova arc, and then pan back into Yuuta's current situation in the script. It would be a decent opener in my opinion. as for the thugs, mall, and various other things, they only need to be improved upon, not necessarily taken out. Keep up the good work bruv 💪 👏 [img=update]
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I’m Not Your Husband, You Evil Dragon!
Fantasy · Ben_Lies
My mind mat be kinda cooked from that recap, but as far as I was able to tell, you're still cooking with Parmesan. Just keep cooking, I'm here for the ride bruv.
This sudden turn in narrative is ingenious. The sudden disappearance, the rewriting of the world so that certain truths no longer apply. This is grappling in a way that the aforementioned chapters weren't quite grasping. Keep it up Author![img=update][img=recommend]
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I’m Not Your Husband, You Evil Dragon!
Fantasy · Ben_Lies
Man, I'm sorry your dog is going through such a tough fight. I hope he beats it and can return home to you! As for this story, I think what I appreciate the most is the unique manner to which Seo-Jin has taken to fatherhood.The fact that he is regarding each son in such different manners and raising them with methods that will bring out different kinds of 'potential (or amusement) is so fresh and entertaining. I really look forward to how he will 'raised his next spawn!
Demon Anomaly System
Fantasy · ValdenePatriarch