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great then i can continue read it.

i usually do not like making reviews except for great ones or worst ones like this, when it is this bad i can't help but vent here. this is my honest take. it was seriously bad, this fanfiction is a middle school wet dream level bad, if you like it i'm not judging people who have their own taste. it has potential to be good,the premise is good just delete most of story and change the author. before anyone says if you don't like it don't read it. let me say this, of course i will read it, everyone that came to see this work will come, read the premise/summary get intrested and read it, how we know it will turn out to be this bad? don't just hide yourself from critics by saying such words. the premise alone is not had but but everything aside that was bad. the concept of wet dream fanfic is a concept used by amateur authors to try to start their career small and make sure no one judges them with writing anything they like, but there is a limit of bad fiction. the prologue and background are totally skip-able They have no value and have no meaning aside from saying that MC is Harem Maniac and his mother with him. the system and starter package are the very lazy excuses people usually make to make it easier to give MC power so they don't have to make a plot, make sure cover all the hole make the mc unkillable by anything exist in the story. it even have 8 more or less chapter to explain all his power and cheat so reader will forget that what he get ia not suppose to be include in starter gift until they realize it getting ridiculous. the MC personalities basically his dick who want harem and that is it, he was the very core concept of most Chinese cultivation novels,hypocrites, arrogant, shameless and all of that. at least some good authors can write their character to have higher moral ground and look better than villain. the plot is basically dead, MC will do anything the author wants depending on mood swing, the system gives ridiculous reward, to make sure he can survive fight or look strong, I don't even want to know about the heroines.

truthfully i have yet to continue reading this until 5 chapters or so. for beginners or new readers of fanfiction you can basically read this and things this is good.but there are people like me who grow with their taste experiencing new fanfiction, web novels and light novels, reading this can't help but to stop reading out of cringe and because it is too absurd.i will not judge people who think this is good, on a certain level if the MC doesn't describe his power in future i think it can be good.first of all is a wet dream fanfic at the beginning without any consequence at all making MC look like an average Minecraft player, seeing most Mine Craft players are children you get the gist.The second is MC cheat that is supposed to be only 3 to begin with because why not take power from the template he takes two give him unnecessary power up in case his not OP enough. and the fact he choose Naruto, Madara and white beard apready give sense of basic weebs. it so overuse i don't know how you can make thing interesting at all with that, the fact he gave all access to their power just to make OP character without character building make him look like cardboard in begining. i can't help but see MC as mentally challenged adult who still do naruto run and live in basement of their parents. third, story setting also same level as chinese fanfic which they just slip people inside japanese anime with fucking chinese name and be done with it, the different chinese fiction albeit MC are standardly annoying it still feel bit more natural.fourth, this is a poorly written OP MC standard for my taste, first of all compared to other fiction work with OP characters like saitama, Anos and etc, which these people describe their power? There is no meaning of this because it just makes people bored, and with most reader knowing what MC uses as a power template it was unnecessary. the fact there a scene where he test his power and describe it in a way of Middle schooler power fantasy make it cringe, no lash back or consequence for power just use it like gta mode, and even give a google translate made up technique because apparently why not? it basically just Amaterasu 1 or Tsukuyomi 1nothing special enough to be a new technique. the inconsistency without limitation of what MC has and has not makes it bad. did i take this too seriously? yes, because i care what i read. people may think that it was just fanfiction, making things up or illogical is fine, but there is a limit and way to make the story feel immersive and if others can why is this not? in the end i just can't handle bad written one.

It's great fanfiction but not for everyone. It feels natural and well written the problem i have with it is the development of the story. while there is nothing wrong written fiction or works showing op bromance to the point it looks gay, I'm a straight man that plan to stay as one. i just hope the author or who ever repost this make a clarification on tag so there no victim like me. it simply not my cup of tea, and reading it make me shiver uncomfortably even with well written plot.

i mean JYouyi?