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Merlin talked to dragons.
i cant read this anymore. i appreciate the poster sharing the initial story, but the writing quality has not just dropped off, but isnt even really complete thoughts or actions at times. I cant read this anymore, its not what got me this far.
ch 152 Sorely Missed
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Book&Literature · a_wizard_did_it
ok, after listing all my grievances with the direction of the story, i have to say harry's reaction to the news of the champions was poorly done. someone doesnt work that hard for that long to achieve a goal, especially coming that close, and just shrug it off. i dont care if his brother is being targeted by being a champion. he can feel more than one thing at a time. to use hermione's words, not everyone has the emotional range of a teaspoon. overall, i think the writing in this fic has been pretty good so far, and got better after harry made it to durmstrang. but i think the ball has been dropped here, in more ways than one.
ch 139 Meeting the Fourth Champion
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Book&Literature · a_wizard_did_it
its like if my character rolled a crit in D&D for an incredibly important test that impacts the session in a major way, and the DM just decides to abruptly send the session another direction directly afterwards in a very blatant and stupid way because he thought the check was too hard and no one could actually pass it. its incredibly poor storytelling, for all involved. no one is satisfied with the outcome.
Dumbledore lost his smile. "Yes, Harry, you were a few seconds too late. The Goblet had already made its decision. I am sorry"
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Book&Literature · a_wizard_did_it
its railroading at its worst.
Dumbledore lost his smile. "Yes, Harry, you were a few seconds too late. The Goblet had already made its decision. I am sorry"
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Book&Literature · a_wizard_did_it
cowards choice, author.
ch 139 Meeting the Fourth Champion
Harry Potter and the Boy Who Lived
Book&Literature · a_wizard_did_it
this entire plotline since he decided he wanted a flying summon is kind of ridiculous. fugaku leaves the frontline forces for weeks, or over a month, with what excuse? and now somehow he and jiraiya are trying to storm hozuki castle for this same penniless princess? i thought this author had a good handle on reasonableness by the mc, but it seems that this fic too, is a failure in this regard.
ch 121 Hōzuki Castle
I Am Fugaku Uchiha
Anime & Comics · stylish_slayer
I think each ring of protection went for a bit less than a galleon, as they were 1 use. since he has made over a quarter million, he should have that much in his personal account, minus any random deductions for crafting materials.
For the things that couldn't be cultivated however the price never went below ten thousand galleons. Such a price was extreme even for Nick to pay with his fortune but he couldn't say it wasn't fair as most of these ingredients could be considered family heirlooms for wizarding families. So with a pained wallet Nick shelled out nearly two million Galleons leaving his fortune at a mere one hundred fifty seven thousand galleons. Still a lot to be sure but Nick was no longer considered uber wealthy as he had less money than the Malfoys by quite a bit.-
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
good chapter
ch 466 Blitz techniques
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
oh, thank goodness the blitz ball stuff is over.
ch 450 Strangeness
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
i have to say these blitzball chapters have the MC so full of himself and everything is such a "runaway success" its like someone had a wet dream and will wake up in the morning and need a shower. frankly, these past few chapters are some of the worst in the fic. I dont even hate the game the author came up with, its alright. the way this has been told just feels disgustingly repugnant to me.
ch 447 New sport craziness
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
who knows what the magical laws are for opening other people's mail? rowling never covered it that i can recall.
ch 101 Aftermath
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
no, but its a very snape thing to do. particularly if he thought something put him up to a dangerous act.
ch 101 Aftermath
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
its not weird to get help from a friend. it IS weird when that friend becomes a professor for an entire class and then becomes a moral authority for the real professor.
"Calm yourself and relax your wand movements , you are flicking it too far forward." He said helpfully and Ron took a deep breath and gently flicked the wand forward and said "LUMOS!" causing the tip of his wand to glow as it was supposed to. Nick nodded at this before walking away to help another student but he still caught the "Thanks" Ron said under his breath and waved it off. The next person Nick helped was Pansy Parkinson from Slytherin who was having the same problem as Ron with how aggressively she was moving her wand.-
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
I have to ask since when did nick become the professor and moral authority advising flitwick? him teaching the class is a bit odd, and even more so telling flitwick its not worth the trouble to reprimand a student for bad behavior? the role reversal here is very awkward feeling.
ch 51 Charms(3)
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
I have certainly critiqued the story, but having written my own I can 100% agree that you write things certain ways for certain reasons and dont owe the reader anything (though if you end up setting up a conflict and not resolving it before the end of the story, youll regret the commen section).
ch 36 Rant(Authors say)
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
its clearly meant to be evan, but the mtl hasnt been proofread at all. usually at least names are proofread for consistency. ill have to see if it gets better or if i can put up with it. im halfway down the page and its a hassle so far.
Ai Wen suddenly woke up and refused to communicate further with the owl in front of him. His right hand slammed forward and waved, trying to drive it away.
Harry Potter and the Secret Tresures
Movies · CMan367