Badges 3
Moments 19
no actually it can happen especially in this sort of situation however, it is usually not good for the sanity of the child
"Chris is five years old and is was woken up to sex by his older brothers and is a lecher you need to be careful darling." With my tone, my mother always treated me as someone older but I don't think she even realized what she said inside her red haze as she was still walking back to our small room.
Dominatrix System
Fantasy 路 Madjic
this novel is really great, as is this chapter ^^
ch 262 The White Lady of Death
Rise of the Legendary Emperor
Fantasy 路 don_offl
innocents are always the first casualty in a war
"NOA! You'll die today!"
Rise of the Legendary Emperor
Fantasy 路 don_offl
The religion is a bit to close to a catholic types. But it's not a big problem. However they is a lack of depth in this chapter. How come they don't react to Maria's status? How come they aren't curious to the status with multiple interrogation points.
ch 0 5 The Day We Are Getting Appraised
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
Alright this chapter had some funny moments but oh god it was ruined by the lack of common sense in the story. Let's not go into details but really the author needs to think about the story not just write some random ideas and link them with the glorious plot armour that we readers absolutely hate.
ch 0 3 I Am a Duke Servant
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
So he starts to work at 3 years old ? Not even in the middle age during the darkest period they were doing this. Please think about what you are writing 馃槶馃槶
"Are you a third-year old?" My father asked.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
that is overkill? How come mere servants have cyanide poison? And how did it get to it? We won't talk about how he survived from the ingestion of one of the deadliest poison.
[Ultimate Appraisal], I get it the other day when I chugged down a cyanide poison mistaking it for water. Well, that was a close call.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
Alright Plot Armour is something that is really hateful. I can do this because I have a super spell in me. No No no. This cannot stand. Because if servants can use that rank of magic, what will strong individuals be able to use in terms of power? It clearly is a god mod that is seriously not good. If you want to change something please do it properly. That sort of thing just kills the mood 馃槴
Apparently there was some unknown passive spell that someone planted in me that prevent irrepairable body damage.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
this chapter is better than the last one. The analysis he is making in the situation is not bad but it could do with a bit more description as it could add some depth to the story. They is no common sense to talk about (a part from the genetic mashup that was made between beast people and demon) because it is a reincarnation. Overall it is not bad but it could be better ^^
ch 0 2 Transported
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
I completely agree 馃槀
I'm not a beastkin, but I had heritage from a demon, so I had a horn-like figure growing from my right forehead, but it more looks like an explosive fragment, to be honest. I had black hair and a human body.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
First chapter's problem is a big lack of commonsense. I already said what was the problem by commenting some parts but really common sense and human emotions are lacking. The MC is looking like a Robot with a self learning program with only a single chance of success on a super hard mission, it basically the moment.However we have to recognize the author trying to be original on the way the story starts. The story looks promising and if the author progress in the thoughts of his story than it could become an excellent isekai with modern tech novel.
ch 0 1 Prologue
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
He should be crying in pain from his injuries if he wasn't unconscious. You make it look like a robot which is a bit sad because they is a lot to do with human emotions
Panicky, I tried to move my hand, but it doesn't move. I tried to move my legs, but it's simply not there. I nodded to the left and right and saw my arm and leg got scattered all across the place. I looked at the dark ground filled with warm fresh blood and feel a burning sensation across my entire body.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
alright this is not good at all. He should have died on the spot, please a bit of common sense. A complete destruction of both body is both dramatic and actually more sensible.
I was thrown to the edge of the building. Luckily, thanks for that I didn't get any serious injury in my head. Well, that sense of luckiness went away pretty soon as I nod at my left direction. I saw Kashmir's body disintegrated, and one of his ribs got stuck on my torso.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
World class terrorist leader in an empty room building. This huge elite veteran soldiers didn't think for a minute that something was off? And he wants to use a knife ? Sound like a bad scenario of call of duty to be honest. It would have been more realistic if he had been betrayed.
It's going to be his last smoke. As I entered the building. Well, it's too empty for the headquarters of a terrorist. This is going to be a piece of cake. I didn't encounter a single guard. This was too good to be true. I saw Kashmir still smoking then I unsheathed my combat knife.
Servants With a Modern Weapon
War 路 MaxwellKHA
I prefer a sadistic but affectionnate dom instead of a mean dom and I am not really into sissy ad I prefer pet play (kitten play for example) but it's not bad^^
ch 12 Chapter 11
Dominatrix System
Fantasy 路 Madjic