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This is a really good read so far, not only are all the basic aspects (extremely)good(grammar, clear lines of thought, difrentation between thought and speech, etc..) the actaul novel itself is fresh, like a breath of air on top of a mountion after being in an airtight room for hours, It has a level of realism which iS not to the extent of which of being annoying but keeps the novel within bondaries of being random, The character springs into action at first but when finally given the time to rest, he is hut by the total realiZation Of the apoclypse, the emituons are good and the writing so far is amazing, i might be a bit late but keep it up

This sorta sounds like a my Vanpire system rip-off, (but this Is only yhe Forth chap) and it has a bunch of similarities, although these are Inevitable with a vampire-apocalypse Setting, Both are set within a military type training Place, both mcs are bullied and powerless at the start, both have a female helper that accepts thier situation waayy too fast and go along with mc, and the mc in this one seems like he will also go get revenge and be sadistic

Grammar is still pretty bad and the wording is also awkward and weird but story is pretty good, the plot needs more direction overall is pretty ok i give B

The wording is a bit bad and needs improvement, the entire story is very awkward to read but the story is great, grammar is ok but needs improvment, Basically the story is badly worded and the grammar needs improvement the story is great

I need a bit of clearing up on the system, like the requirements for evolution, powers, and uses there is no clear information and it is really frustrating

Like i get it, fast pacing is great and im a fan of fast moving action packed books but this is too fast. the pacing is irregular, paying attention to the smallest not-needed details in one chapter and in the next skipping 6 years. we need more info on the training and magyca too, we got the names and no personalities, whilst the mc is acting like he is buddies with people who have barely been inteoduced

What was the bump or weak spot, i need a bit of clarification

I need a It of clarification, are there going to be aliens invading earth or is it only one alien hunter?

THANK U👌👌😭😭

I AM GOING THRU WITHDAWL PLZ HELP

Nearly all the sentences had expmation marks and it was kinda weird

I am sorry for your loss, i know that it must be hard and whatever you do, do not for a second think that anything takes proirity over yourself, and my condolences

Story line, plot, backround and characters are great and has a lot of potential the grammar needs some fixing but compared to orher stories this is still managable

Sooo i need a bit of clarification on the size of the snake bec it goes from breaking down walls and trees to being a bracer

Tank u for such a good book uwu

THIS CLIFF IS ILLEGAL

Grammar i bad but within dealable range, the story line is great although non-original, the real problem are the stats, with the weird non number based grading system it is extremely hard to figure out who will beat who

The arks are waaay too long, although the story is amazing a single arc should not take this long and the part woth the school was completely unessesary