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Fantasy · whiteribbon27
two can play the game*
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Fantasy · whiteribbon27
I'm just 5'0...being 5'4 is a dream
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Fantasy · whiteribbon27
you have missed the full stops at the end of dialogues in many places.
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Fantasy · whiteribbon27
hey I know I finished my review and all but I wanted to continue reading. So a couple things, 1. Try naming ur chapters differently, smthing that would be more appealing to the reader. 2. I noticed that you used sm words too many times, other might not so it's not that big a deal but it's still a minor issue 3. A couple missing commas, again, not a big problem but it's still a problem. Other than that ur book is seriously amazing and the plot is just ...I have no words!
ch 0 5 Dinner - In Sync
Urban · KCChakry
Curtain*
That small movement attracted Lucian's attention towards the woman but he couldn't see anything past the curtains of her hair that was shielding her face.
Urban · KCChakry
hey there, it's not dialogue heavy chap! I thought it was perfectly fine.
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Fantasy · RD_Hughes
easy to say, hard to keep up XD
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Fantasy · RD_Hughes
Try using laughed or chuckled instead of giggled. It gives the doc a more professional appearance
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Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH
doing*
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Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH
I just wanted to point out that changed from You Xi Wang to You Xiwang, was that intentional?
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Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH
You Xi Wang*
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Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH
Hey, thank you so much❤️
The Silent Phoenix
Teen · Khyati94820