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male LV 4I need to get off this app...
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I think he is poking fun at both genres being survival
[Select the Game Genre/s: {Survival}, {Zombie Survival}]
God-Level Game Developer System: I Brought In-Game Items To Real World
Games · ShadowKatake
POV: Rapist #45
Although Weiss was a shut-in gamer, he was someone who had an indoor gym in his mansion. With various martial arts in his arsenal, Weiss had knocked out hundreds of rapists but he didn't feel any relief or satisfaction.
God-Level Game Developer System: I Brought In-Game Items To Real World
Games · ShadowKatake
You made your account 46 days ago and commented 402 times. You have commented roughly 8.7 times a day. With that being said, yes, I agree, Gregory wasn't the best name :)
"I can't wait to meet Uncle Stan, I really need to go to the bathroom," Mabel said with a red face.
becoming Dipper in Gravity falls isn’t So bad ,is it??
Anime & Comics · Herohero
I would have posted this on Royal Road before here, I don't remember the last time a non reincarnation story was ever in the power top 10. I don't think the audience here is really geared towards this type of stuff. They would probably think that its too slow, or just wont be interested in the first place.
(Update from over 2 years later, I have been convinced to put this on Web Novel as well, due to its relative success on both A03 and FFN. So hi… man I forgot how bad at writing I was when I started.)
Rain of Sins
Anime & Comics · Z75
Before I read this I would like to say this. Author, your main character can't both be a villain and an anti-hero. I'll give you an example to help you out. A villain is someone who uses bad methods to achieve bad results, an anti-hero is someone who uses bad methods to achieve good results. Sooo maybe change those tags XD
Prologue
Rain of Sins
Anime & Comics · Z75
Hey furries are rich, fursuits are not cheep. So go ahead and milk those furries for all they are worth! Wait... that came out wrong...
When I saw this werewolf howling for text at the end of the message, I got a shuddering feeling that almost made me close this conversation window and stop working with it, but I needed the money...
Gamer Superstar
Fantasy · NunuXD
Author, I feel like this scene could have been a lot better. Don't take this the wrong way, but reading this annoyed me, I don't particularly like being told what is happening without any nuance as if I am a child. The original is to heavy-handed and overly simplistic. A small smile landed itself on my face, the silence wasn't so bad for some reason, actually, it was kind of refreshing, peaceful. "Hmm... What are you smiling about?" I looked to see my father watching me. "Oh, heh, it's nothing..." We continued to eat in silence. There is an example of how it could be written, I added dialogue because of all the subtext that was conveyed in that simple back and forth. Basically, show don't tell.
Even though no one said anything, I was very happy with this simple moment, since I can't even remember a moment of such peace in my previous life with my old father.
Gamer Superstar
Fantasy · NunuXD
Is the Charisma stat a reflection of physical appearance or is it more along the lines of likability?
| Charisma (CHA): 3
Gamer Superstar
Fantasy · NunuXD
"I can't wait to meet Uncle Stan, I really need to go to the bathroom," Mabel said with a red face.
becoming Dipper in Gravity falls isn’t So bad ,is it??
Anime & Comics · Herohero
Nobody talks like that author XD "I can't wait to see Uncle Stan!" Mable said with an excited expression, but said expression slowly turned sour. "Ugh, I really need to go..." Mabel's face turned red in her discomfort. That's how I would write it.
"I can't wait to meet Uncle Stan, I really need to go to the bathroom," Mabel said with a red face.
becoming Dipper in Gravity falls isn’t So bad ,is it??
Anime & Comics · Herohero
"Sir we are losing him to the gutter" "Andy snap out of it! You're going to deep!" "I think we lost him sir."
Of course, that wasn't all since he also asked to obtain the "Vegapunk essence" which should normally give him the intelligence of vegapunk scientist, his memory, his IQ and also the ability of his flawless fruit.
becoming Dipper in Gravity falls isn’t So bad ,is it??
Anime & Comics · Herohero
That's good then, if everyone was like me and didn't derive enjoyment from constantly being interrupted from the story with a/n that serve no purpose other than a quick joke, then this wouldn't be as popular as it is. You could argue that the a/n give to the story in humor, and I would agree, I just didn't find most of them funny. The a/n that just say "insert image of {blank}" are lazy though, they are only there to increase engagement, I would know, I did same thing in my fanfic. The way I did it though made the reader actively think about the story and how my MC's powers could be applied.
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MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM
Movies · NunuXD
I am only saying that gummy bears are tasty and I'd like to eat one ou- I mean eat one
"The war is over! The war is over!" Watching the jubilant crowd in front of him, Kenichi Yumigami couldn't feel any joy. He only thought these people were too noisy.
Studying under Orochimaru, the Evil Scientist of Hidden Leaf Village
Anime & Comics · ANIME_SIMPA
noooo forgot to add the "d" in "heard"
Bro is looking like a snack
"The war is over! The war is over!" Watching the jubilant crowd in front of him, Kenichi Yumigami couldn't feel any joy. He only thought these people were too noisy.
Studying under Orochimaru, the Evil Scientist of Hidden Leaf Village
Anime & Comics · ANIME_SIMPA
Kenichi YummyGummy
"The war is over! The war is over!" Watching the jubilant crowd in front of him, Kenichi Yumigami couldn't feel any joy. He only thought these people were too noisy.
Studying under Orochimaru, the Evil Scientist of Hidden Leaf Village
Anime & Comics · ANIME_SIMPA
'I don't know. Maybe I want you to bear my future cubs because although Snow Leopards are called 'leopards', they are more closely related to Tigers than leopards so you should be able to bear my cubs.' I answered in my mind.
More than a Dragon Warrior
Movies · Emmanuel_Capricorn
Exactly, you could follow the plot for a bit, but eventually you'll change enough where its effectively an AU, its inevitable.
[A.N: I know Nawaki died on the next day after his birthday and Tsunade was present in the village, it's not AU, I have put a reasonable explanation later in the story}
Konoha: The Template System
Anime & Comics · Tobi_444