I like the concept that combines the advanced setting and medieval setting, I also love the way you describe the fight scenes (chapter 11) I just want maybe a good improvement in the culture of the Empire and Religion and their magic system. Then get little slower in pacing. Additional, try describing the characters one or twice per chapter. For readers to remember more, also their motivation. I'm looking forward to the exiled prince, his story. Since there are demi-humanoids in the empire, maybe you should also explore the discrimination on their part. The description is good especially for weapons, the pacing is really pretty fast.
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I like the concept that combines the advanced setting and medieval setting, I also love the way you describe the fight scenes (chapter 11) I just want maybe a good improvement in the culture of the Empire and Religion and their magic system. Then get little slower in pacing. Additional, try describing the characters one or twice per chapter. For readers to remember more, also their motivation. I'm looking forward to the exiled prince, his story. Since there are demi-humanoids in the empire, maybe you should also explore the discrimination on their part. The description is good especially for weapons, the pacing is really pretty fast.
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Fantasy · Quartermaster