Webnovel Author: Kystal88 - Novel Collection

Kystal88

3yr

Posted

Overall a very interesting and good story. I can see where a couple of folks have left comments with suggestions for edits- they looked to be correct, and they'll make the story a little more polished. I enjoyed reading the prologue-type of introduction, and it really set up your story for success in the later chapters, very good use of that writing tactic. The characters' interactions are above average here on WN, and the suspense build up is perfect. Good job, and keep writing, dear author!

Kystal88

3yr

Commented

Accidentally added a " at the end of this sentence. Please delete when fixed, dear author :)

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Kystal88

3yr

Posted

What I like about the story is that it isn't cookie-cutter powerful MC that knows all, sees all, can do all. It's likable and interesting with the threat of the unknown keeping the character off balance. The storyline is engaging, and I enjoy reading the interactions between the characters so far. If you have the ability, I would recommend finding an editor for your work to give it that extra 'polish' and make it easier to digest. All in all, definitely a good read. Keep it up, dear author!

Kystal88

3yr

Commented

I believe it was still meant to be Griffin? Please delete when corrected / if I am incorrect, dear author :) :)

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Kystal88

3yr

Replied to sir_impeccable

thank you!!!! <3

Kystal88

3yr

Replied to ElleDoves

Thank you so much for your kind words, it means a lot!!! :) :) encouragement like yours keeps me going :D

Kystal88

3yr

Replied to Alaura90

Thank you so much for your kind words!! You made me smile so much :)

Kystal88

3yr

Posted

Story is very good, an interesting take on the politics of the gods. It makes me think of Diablo, somehow. (compliment!) I read until chapter 6, the action was well-paced, and the world building was spot on, explaining just enough that the reader isn't lost, but not shoving exposition in where it isn't necessary. I enjoyed my time reading this, Dear Author, I am glad that you are able to continue writing successfully!

Kystal88

3yr

Posted

Hello. I find your work engaging. The premise is interesting, and the MC has a good driving reason 'why'. I enjoyed reading your novel, and read all 7 chapters before I realized it. The action starts right away as well, which is good for grabbing attention, and as always, there is something to fear from an enemy that can't be reasoned or bargained with. Please continue writing, dear author!

Kystal88

3yr

Posted

This is a very powerful and well written story. There is a certain gravity and weight behind the author's words that I haven't run into very often on online platforms. The characters are multi-dimensional and well written, their interactions feel natural (family to family, peer to peer, senior to junior) It's also very educational in some ways, under the guise of a story. Well done, author!

I always enjoyed reading mystery works, so I was excited to begin this one. I am reminded of Conan Doyle's style of writing with the short stories all somewhat connected together. (Compliment, btw, I love ACD) I PERSONALLY always enjoy the character being undescribed and ungendered, as my own bias, makes it easier for anybody on earth to put themselves in the MC's (or supporting character in this case!) shoes. My own MC's I go out of the way to never mention hair or eye color, race, etc. Again, my own bias there. The "mysteries" are spaced out enough for the reader to draw their own conclusions, something else I enjoy. I like your work, Author, keep it up!

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Kystal88

3yr

Replied to CoolForniteplayer

Thanks so much <3

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Kystal88

3yr

Posted

Hello author! I like the premise of the story, isekai is one of my favorite genres, tbh. I like the potential in your story, and the characters are engaging and interesting. The lore of the story is good, and it brings depth into the tale. The one thing I would say, Author, that might be constructive criticism, is in English it is hard for me to read the story. I'm sure that's true of most translations, though... keep that fire in your belly for writing :3

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Action · CoolForniteplayer

Kystal88

3yr

Commented

More of the strange "???" characters here. Sorry, author!!

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Kystal88

3yr

Commented

When I copy/paste in my books, extra odd characters get thrown in there, you can see the two "??" symbols here. I really don't know where they come from, but you can edit them out, author, if you so please