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Minky4981

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2020-08-16 Joined United Kingdom

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Typo - vehicle

"Get out of the viecheals, if you try anything we will attack."

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Vorden would have said not to go near the tablet not Logan

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I think it is supposed to read “flat plain wasteland”

Just like the planet, they had come from; it was dark outside when looking at the sky. All of them seemed to be in a strange open wasteland. There were no trees like where they once were, and there seemed to be nothing around them at all. No lake's no hills, just a fat plain wasteland.

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Well that escalated quickly

A few days later, a report had come in for the Supreme commander. Stating that Truedream city and all of its inhabitants, had been wiped off of the face of the earth.

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I think “setas” is a typo, think it should be seats

When everyone sat in thier setas thier was a heavy atmosphere. When looking around, they noticed that many seats were left empty, empty form those who had died.

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I think you mean parties not pirates

By this point, Fay had already calmed down from her anger before. Doing or saying anything would just be a waste of breath. So she decided to take the political stance instead. Doing what was best for both pirates.

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“Over there” not “other there”

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Emitting from, not form

The beast seemed to be cautious about the two opponents in front of it. It didn't know why, but it felt like they were different to the ones before it. The presence emitting form these two were similar to the boy it had thought before. Still, it wasn't entirely the same.

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Whe first “when” Is a grammatical error

Usually when it would appear when he faced a strong opponent of some sort. This also happened when he was to face Leo. He found it strange that nothing had come up for the advanced tier beast.

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