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I’m confused I thought he had a crush on the girl Serms odd that he would see her as a waste of time
Hunter wanted to ask Michaela about her skill, but figured it did not matter. If she wanted to become stronger, she would have to bring it up with Hunter. He didn't want to waste any effort for someone who doesn't seek strength.
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Good to see Michaela’s a bad ass
ch 17 Michaela’s Secret
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HAha
He still didn't completely 100% trust Michaela yet, but he was letting his feelings for her get the better of him. Since Hunter lived in the same apartment as Michaela, he got a feel for her personality.
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I like the introduction of the girl But dont use Lady
ch 0 9 Screaming Girl
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Lady? Maybe Girl is better if she is young and beautiful
As Hunter got to the bottom of the stairs he saw 3 zombies surrounding the lady. The lady's arm was bleeding profusely.
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Good chapter
ch 0 7 Kendall’s First Skill
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Typo Best not Beat
"There are two zombies down the stairs. I believe the beat course of action is to keep the high ground and lead them up the stairs. They are very strong so make sure not to be hit by any of them, but they are fairly slow." Hunter recalled his last encounter with the zombie and told his sister the details.
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best
"There are two zombies down the stairs. I believe the beat course of action is to keep the high ground and lead them up the stairs. They are very strong so make sure not to be hit by any of them, but they are fairly slow." Hunter recalled his last encounter with the zombie and told his sister the details.
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I think you can do better with the school dropout storyline Poor people foT pay for school But thete are many other important reasons the author could use for keeping her in school Otherwise good chapter
ch 0 3 Are you high?
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Sister is not likable Perhaps thats intentional If not, work on it Again character devopment is lacking both physical, intellectual and emotional Timeline issues contInue ITs not believable that Hunter droppec out of school at 10 years old Make it more realistic Help reader to care about these kids
ch 0 2 Level Up
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Timeline doesnt make sense If sistet is not active why is she up before daylight? Why is she so rude? Why would Hunter need her to make toast? He seems capable of doing this Could work more on character development in early chapters
ch 0 1 When the Monsters Invade
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Thank you for your service Love the novel and I will check back often!
ch 26 Hello Everyone!
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