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I like stories that take place in the past, especially fantasy stories, but this didn't feel right. This reminded me of Legend of Korra where there's electricity in the same place where there's magic. What's the point in having magic if there's technology? The story pacing is too fast and jumps around too much but I just don't understand the world building

Some of my biggest issues with this story are the weird slang the voice chick uses, the pacing and the MC. Slam donkeys? Pay pigging? Those terms make me cringe! The story picks up pace after the fourth chapter and before that, things are really slow. The funniest part so far was the thong scene in chapter five and that's it. The author constantly brings up the MC's hair and weight and constantly makes fun of him for it. Those jokes get old fast. Ben reminds me of Michael Scott but younger and self-aware of the fact that people don't like him. I like comedic stories where bad things happen to an unlikable protagonist (i.e. Dwight Schrute in The Office) but this story didn't make me laugh much