Webnovel Author: iam_adh - Novel Collection

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

There are some grammatical mistakes here and there and the flow sometimes is bumpy. I do wish this was fixed for I would have enjoyed the story more but right now its okay to read. The plot on the other hand is nice and the characters are likeable. Keep up the good work.

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

The first chapter was a bit short to me and there's not much that I can go off of but I do have suggestions. When it comes to dialog, its best to have the person speaking have its own paragraph, for example: Auo raised his hand to his temple, rubbing his head to lessen the oncoming headache. "I don't want him on my team," he said with anger laced in his tone. "Too bad," Beck began," he's the only player left so you must have him on your team." Also, some sentences were incomplete and lacked tone and mood. Despite this the plot is interesting and the setting isn't too hard to understand. The characters so far are realistic and the world background has potential to become more.

Some of the sentences were formatted in a weird way and it greatly disrupted the flow of the story. However the use of words in some instances were lovely. The story has potential it just needs a tad bit of editing here and there and it would be like any other gem. Keep up the good work!

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iam_adh

2yr

Posted

The story is a bit cliche and it was a little bit of a bummer. I would love if there was more description and detail. However, the plot seems to be going in a good direction. Keep up the good work author!

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Fantasy · YIANUWANGXIAO

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

It's a nice read. However there are some points that could be worked on. For example there are some grammatical mistakes here and there. The story is a bit fast paced however I can see this story going places. Keep up the good work author.

A Cold Alien Guy

Teen · HIDAYAWU

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

It's a nice read, I like how simple it is and the realistic factors incorporated into the story. There needs to be some changes here and there when it comes to dialogue and more description would be nice, otherwise, this story is good.

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LGBT+ · Muthoni_Murira

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

Again with the ( ") and ( ' ), ( ' ) needs to be changed to ( " ).

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LGBT+ · Muthoni_Murira

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

For internal monologue's I suggest you use ( ' ) instead of ( " ) because ( " ) usually means someone is talking to another.

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LGBT+ · Muthoni_Murira

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

It's a little rough around the edges. Some of the sentences are difficult to understand and the story seems a bit fast paced. However, I can see the potential the story had it just needs more carving done. Keep up the good work author!

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Fantasy · Ninestar619

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

Ayoo?

"Tsk! That annoying sigh again! I know a where a place where I can shut you up and make you scream at the same time." veins were popping out of Nick's forehead.

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Urban · JhiThan_Ser

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

Its a great story so far, the character development is well made and the pacing of the story is well. I do wish the world background was a bit more established. Besides this, the story is well did.

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Fantasy · Ariel_x

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

She needs to work on her anger issues and her attitude.

Camry banged her fist on the table startling the woman. She glared at her really hard before walking out of the office.

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Fantasy · Ariel_x

iam_adh

2yr

Replied to iam_adh

I meant to say are not fetishized

Mamori Tai

LGBT+ · Idyllic_Scribe

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

I like how soft the story is, presumably. I also like the real life mental issues are fetishized and the author seemed to put much work into their project. There are some typos here and there and the realistic effect is a bit complicated to explain. However, this is a good book so far. and I expect good things in the future!

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LGBT+ · Idyllic_Scribe

iam_adh

2yr

Posted

The writing is lovely. It's been a long time since I've seen writing of this quality on Webnovel. The novel itself is interesting and I have high hopes for it. As of now the novel is in its early stages so I can't give the most thorough review but this novel shows promise. Keep up the good work author!

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Fantasy · AxlSLL

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

Watch him not remember

"William Amber," spoke the prisoner of a shaved head and emerald eyes in front of him, a young man near his same age of 21 years old. "I saw you back on Sunia, right before these baffoons ambushed us. You killed three above that hill before they finally captured you, right?" he let out a tired grin. "Good job."

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Fantasy · AxlSLL

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

nani?

"Hey, you woke up," a smokey voice spoke by his side, sitting with his hands tied on the beams behind, just like the other six prisoners in the room. "What's your name?"

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Fantasy · AxlSLL

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

oh my god please

"It's fine, I understand why you were worried, but you need to realize Ian Lim, I'm not like other girls." Camilla said with a grin as she noticed the photo behind Ian.

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Realistic · wounded_warrior

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

lol

"People have even gone as far as assuming that he and the Reyes Heir are in fact a couple." Luis said as he laughed.

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Realistic · wounded_warrior

iam_adh

2yr

Commented

Nope I wouldn't want my SO to do that to another person.

"Well just think of it this way, we are really in essence trainees as well." Ian said as he draped an arm over Camilla's shoulder, which she shrugged off.

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Realistic · wounded_warrior

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