Looking onward
Alrighty! I can see that you are new to writing. Your concept is interesting, and what I liked more was how you're focussing on giving the enemy a background as well. It helps in creating insight. If I may be so bold, I'd like to suggest that you replace dialogues with descriptions about character's response and emotions. Try to keep dialogues to a bare minimum so that you can create an impact when humour is what you want to display. And don't you worry about writing, you'll get better over time. P.S. I gave it a read this morning but I wasn't logged in. Just mentioned it if my name doesn't show up in your reads.
Fantasy · Shionokami
Thank you so much! :D
Fantasy · Onwer
Wow, your comment made my day! Thank you!
I'm glad you liked the cover :D
Thank you very much!
You're welcome!
Fantasy · spicyscribbles
I really liked how you're pacing the story. Not too slow, not too fast. The concept of helping out your own character is interesting. Keep up with the good work!
Eastern · SnowPenguin
This story is so wholesome! Not only is your writing superb, you also have a wonderful sense of humour! I loved it. Adding it to my library.
Hahahaha
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A pirate needs a talking bird, after all!
Bags saved!
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Fantasy · KazzenlX
Pornographic Content Hate or bullying Release of personal info Violence Spam Other
Alrighty! I can see that you are new to writing. Your concept is interesting, and what I liked more was how you're focussing on giving the enemy a background as well. It helps in creating insight. If I may be so bold, I'd like to suggest that you replace dialogues with descriptions about character's response and emotions. Try to keep dialogues to a bare minimum so that you can create an impact when humour is what you want to display. And don't you worry about writing, you'll get better over time. P.S. I gave it a read this morning but I wasn't logged in. Just mentioned it if my name doesn't show up in your reads.
Endbringer
Fantasy · Shionokami