I would recommend using speech marks "..." to show when a person is talking. It should make it easier to read. Other than that, this is a very enjoyable fanfiction so far. Keep up the good work!
"Wich" should be changed to "Which".
So the mc has powers wich are inspired by the abilities of the MC of the game: shadow or war wich is a great game.
A wraith in GOT
TV · FrikandelSpeciaal
I believe the bifrost was around in this time because Bor, Odin's father, used it in the war against the dark elves before they went into hiding. But I don't mind it not being around at this time.
As of right now in the Timeline Asgard is not a city made of Uru and gold and has not created the Bifrost yet... As of right now, they don't have all the advanced technology that was seen in the Movie... Instead, they have spaceships for now instead of the Bifrost.
Reborn as the younger Twin Sister of Hela in MCU! [Up for Adoption]
Movies · Crimson1997
"ruffle" should be "roughly" I think.
The next day my father decided it was time for me to learn to hunt. Being woken up with the moon a little bit after it's high mark, ruffle 3 am. My brother had healed mostly so he was also awoken. Waking up my father said "Your old enough to learn to hunt, let's get a quick meal and go." We walked out of our partitioned room and ate a quick egg sandwich which was an egg, left over elk steak and bread. As walking out my mother said "Good luck and I will have your sister tell Floki you won't be by today."
Hp The Ageless
Book&Literature · BigSteve
Liking the story so far. Keep up the good work. 👍
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I think that is Martian Manhunter's disguise on earth.
"Wonder Woman and General Swanwick can wait. I'll find an opportunity to invite them."
DC:Reborn as SHAZAM
Movies · Webnovel_Addicted