I really like the changes in perspective from character to character; however, I feel that the sudden change from third person to first person is too jarring. Maybe try staying in the same point of view, but still switching between characters.
ch 112 I will let you go (1)
Urban · Barbare
Ostrexora, on the other hand, had not given a damn since the beginning, just floating passively above them and gloating over their misfortune. If she had wanted to, none of this would have happened. Unfazed by the drama around her, she continued to act as if she didn't hear anything and an untold fury began to fester in Jake's mind.
Sci-fi · Arkinslize
I personally like writing done in third person more, but I still think the chapter was still very good.
ch 103 The main dish (5)
Urban · Barbare
I asked myself the same thing
It was aimed straight at Liu Bubai.
Eastern · Li Hongtian
Liu Bubai was not one for subtlety. He nodded and declared, "Master, get ready to lose!"
Eastern · Li Hongtian
Harry Potter
"Forget it! I will know if I simply drink it. The worst-case would be death or turning into a mathematician." Xia Fei scanned his hideous room with his eyes and said, "It doesn't matter what grade it is; it is definitely not going to be worse than my current state."
Sci-fi · 9 lightyears per second
Then, he raised his eyes, where the flash came from. They immediately popped out of their sockets as what he saw was so unbelievable, that he could hardly keep himself in check.
Sci-fi · Arkinslize
wife.exe has stopped working
"I just received a letter saying that our boy is taking the Promotional Tests…" he sounded half-skeptical and nasally at the same time. He suddenly heard something shatter from the kitchen which made him flinch. He hurriedly stood up to check on her only to find out that she was somewhat…'malfunctioning'.
Fantasy · Hateful_Fellow
"Creed of the Sun Warriors." He saw a huge flag with an image of a sun on it's center. Beneath it, there are some tables and chairs and some left over documents, Raven didn't pay any attention to that and instead walked towards one of the rooms. The door was old but it could be activated just like the entrance so it didn't give him any resistance.
Fantasy · Hateful_Fellow
Thanks :)
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Fantasy · Syphiinz
"I-I'm sorry... f-forget what I just said." He apologized while shaking, seeing that Lazar was looking at him like a diligent gardener might look at a weed he had just discovered at the end of a long, tiring and painful day of work...
Urban · Barbare
Yes, switching characters but staying in third-person limited pov compared to switching to first-person pov.
ch 112 I will let you go (1)
Bound to Evil
Urban · Barbare