Badges 15
Moments 21
Easy: “Manus” (m-anus)
Truth to be told, Brinja had searched for a Magus equivalent, but to no avail.
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
Large and gigantic? Why the repetition of two words that mean the same thing?
Eventually Quinn could see a beautiful sight in front of him. There was a watery lake inside the castle grounds. It was large, and gigantic. There was a pathway that was built out and a small little platform where one could sit out and enjoy the view of the lake.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Probably want to just use forge here instead of forgery, forge is where you craft things and forgery is a fake copy of something that is passed off as being real.
Quinn stood a floor under the main lab where Logan's base would be. This was where the forgery was, with two large thick doors leading to the forgery. Rather than opening the door, Quinn used his shadow travel skill to travel underneath and reappear on the other side.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Stingers not singers
The next moment, the three singers from the ground fell onto the floor.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Halt not help
The fighting had spread over several streets, on top of buildings, and even more throughout the city. Still, not everything was in favour of the Dhampirs as their progress was coming to a somewhat help due to one particular reason.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Mitchell not Mithcell
"They are dangerous, and now is not the time. It is best if we wait." Although she said this, Muka still felt slightly nervous, and Mithcell, who was standing closest to her, could hear her say a couple more words quietly under her breath. "I think…"
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
I think you meant “Essentially”
With still some time left, the group decided to use this as an opportunity to assess Mitchell. Esseintley, it was to help him get used to the Celestial energy from within, just like Peter had done.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Celestial, need to spell check better
However, Quinn didn't really know what he smelled like; the different ranks of vampires would smell slightly different and honestly, it was harder for the lower ranks to distinguish between these smells. To top it off, he would assume that he was the first of his kind, the first ever Cleisital vampire. Perhaps he smelt like a subclass or a lowly vampire to the person in front of him which was why she was comfortable speaking to him in this way. Regardless, it was clear that even though she knew he was a vampire, she didn't recognise him; perhaps there was some tension going on among the vampires.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Aesthetics not attics, feel like that’s more than a minor mistake that should’ve been caught during editing
Only, the design in this place suited more modern attics. It was streamlined smooth; hardly any edges or wires could be seen. It almost didn't feel like he was in a ship at all. Heading towards the ship's bridge, he soon ran into Logan and Layla.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
“receiving” not “reaching”
After reaching this news, Quinn stood on top of the base. He looked far out and could see the leaders already in their positions with their hands raised. In front of him, Bonny and Void were now standing on top of the base as well. Behind them were Peach and Ivy. They had a casket that contained Helen's body inside.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Leveling, received, message… gotta work on those typos man
After levlling up to level 70 Quinn had resvied no such messge. After unlocking the full power of the system, nothing had come up. Finally, after absorbing the blood crystals, Quinn had been given a hint to the quest.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Forging area not foraging
For now Quinn decided to keep the upgrading crystal with him. With the risk involved, he preferred to think about it some more and once he had made his choice, he would see if Alex could use it in some way.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
“what would that cost?” not “what that would cost?”
However, Leo was clear what their goal was, it was to bring back the vampire knight in one piece, not to defeat Remus. If he was on his own, then maybe he would use everything he had in his arsenal to try to defeat the person in front of him, only risking his own life. He had even considered that for a second, but the problem was what that would cost?
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
Foes, don’t need the apostrophe
But the days of testing his strength against strong foe's were over.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
“Fresh” not “fresher”
Eventually, their tracks led them to find a few footsteps in the mud here or there, some quite fresher. Also, parts of the jungle looked to have the tree's pushed and parted away.
My Vampire System
Fantasy · JKSManga
See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
ch 1480 Fathers and Son (Part 2)
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20
I think you meant phalange, it’s the phalanx bone but phalange is the more commonly used term
In the space of two heartbeats, all the undead bats were on the ground, and this time for good. They had been shredded in so many pieces that the biggest was the size of a single human phalanx.
Supreme Magus
Fantasy · Legion20