Jedidiah_Burney

1yr

Posted

this is unreadable. Barely put together and throws the main into sex randomly. Not to mention the only explanation in the whole book about his orgins is in the description. I strongly suggest this piece to be taken down as it can't even be considered complete.

Tower Harem

Fantasy · AmNotnuttyy

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Commented

Could you at least actually describe the sound? Like this, ShReech! And I suggest that you use more words to describe the sound that it makes. Something like, THUD, BANG, POP, WOOSH, try to imagin the sound in your head and then writing what you would describe as the sound. Like the rooster cock-a-doodle doo. You can write sounds down on paper, try it[img=recommend]

"Scree!"

The Magician of Sound

Sci-fi · Fixten

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Commented

Thought it didn't show.[img=exp]

[Focus: 163]

Infinite Mana in the Apocalypse

Games · Adui

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Replied to JacksonWalker

Don't know why I am replying, but he did make many more mistakes than you mentioned. I am enjoying the book so I don't want to point them out.[img=exp]Main reason for reply[img=exp]

I felt anger quickly boiling up inside me before I squashed it down. How the hell did they find me so fast?!

Infinite Mana in the Apocalypse

Games · Adui

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Commented

Nice.

Perception: 69

Solo Leveling(Only I Level Up)

Urban · 추공 (Chugong)

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Posted

It is nice. But I personally don't like the vampire with the game system. So not a fan of vampires. This story is only possible because of the vampire lover girl. What I would do if I became a vampire is die. I refuse to drink blood even if it killed me.

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Commented

The small part that I can read of the next chapter tells me that it is unlikely to be the end of the cliffhanger.

ch 77 Losing it all

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Replied to Miles_reffler

Cliffangers my old enemy.

ch 77 Losing it all

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

Jedidiah_Burney

3yr

Posted

I read about 38 chapters, and I think that The writer could do better on the names. Haven't experienced the updates. No idea the timeline there in, nor place they reside. So over all I would say that it is a good novel but the writing needs inprovment. The characters introduced were done well but the naming is cofusing.[img=coins]