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shadow_serpent

shadow_serpent

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2020-09-02 Joined Global

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because the only other powered person he's seen other than him and David is there? I feel like that's a good reason.

With little time for contemplation, Malachi decided to inform the group upstairs first that they were safe to come outside. There was no specific reason for choosing this group first; it was a quick, instinctive decision.

Strongest Dad In The Apocalypse

Strongest Dad In The Apocalypse

Fantasy · Aurora_Drakon

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Replied to Bodhi_sattva

no problem! I try to do it when I catch repeated mistakes. I'd recommend re-reading what you have posted so far and check for errors.

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Part-Time Godkiller

Part-Time Godkiller

Fantasy · Bodhi_sattva

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Replied to Kinshu_War

I am now far more inclined to read this through. However, small tip, you often no place "i" before "am" so it comes as "am sorry, ____"

But what he or Lovette didn't expect was that that very determination would be a catalyst of something much greater and beautiful in Cole's journey.

The flame Monarch

The flame Monarch

Fantasy · Kinshu_War

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Replied to Kinshu_War

hopefully no harem.

But what he or Lovette didn't expect was that that very determination would be a catalyst of something much greater and beautiful in Cole's journey.

The flame Monarch

The flame Monarch

Fantasy · Kinshu_War

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Commented

"Dave seized the opportunity, "?? who's Dave? And what opportunity?

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Part-Time Godkiller

Part-Time Godkiller

Fantasy · Bodhi_sattva

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shadow_serpent
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This entire paragraph makes no sense.

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shadow_serpent
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so wait, this increases status durations for him? and Like skill effect-duration?

- The user calls upon the Gha Agsheblah Domain that doubles the user's time for a certain duration.

Omega Summoner

Omega Summoner

Games · XiaoKongxu

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shadow_serpent
shadow_serpent
Commented

should be "bracing" not "branching"

A second after Jacob activates his talent, the monster starts to change direction. They roar and start running at the two hundred men who are branching for impact.

I Try To Enjoy My Life But This Woman Keep Calling Me Villain

I Try To Enjoy My Life But This Woman Keep Calling Me Villain

Fantasy · LuxVonDeux

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Commented

I REALLY hope this doesn't lead to excessive fawning over mc; and or harem.

As Vargus navigated through the division, he couldn't help but notice the curious glances directed his way. It became clear to him that his presence was an anomaly in this female-dominated area, marking him as the first male, other than the sect leader, to step foot here.

The Cutest Barbarian Tamer

The Cutest Barbarian Tamer

Fantasy · HaozDancer

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In short, everything Grey had done was ridiculously twisted, and he was now selling himself as a hero and potential business partner while using it to make money. Like a boss.

[Greed Online]

[Greed Online]

Games · Margrave

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Commented

"rhythm" is repeated to quickly.

The rhythm of the battlefield has changed. The rhythm has changed with Jullian and his unit creating havoc in the enemy's backline and now a new unit joining the battle. The previous defensive tactic that Alexander quickly changed into an offensive one.

I Try To Enjoy My Life But This Woman Keep Calling Me Villain

I Try To Enjoy My Life But This Woman Keep Calling Me Villain

Fantasy · LuxVonDeux

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Commented

"can't win against him"*

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Cosmic Ruler

Cosmic Ruler

Fantasy · Enigmatic_Dream

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Commented

i'm sorry what? how did he get elemental abilities? he hasn't eaten anything or anyone with elemental magic and mimics generally wouldn't have elemental magic. please explain.

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