Webnovel Author: greyknight - Novel Collection

Hello author, first, I want to say that I loved your detailed descriptions; it helped me feel more immersed in the story. I can tell it’s a gem in the works :) Although, I would like to put forward a suggestion; if you don’t mind, could you perhaps shorten the paragraphs more? I quickly perused ahead and noticed the paragraphs were consistently on the thicker side. It is quite hard to read when there are multiple layers of words stacked on top of each other. I think other readers likely would appreciate this too, and newcomers may be easily more hooked if they were shorter. Maybe an average of 2-3 sentences each paragraph would be great! This is just a suggestion, please do what you personally decide is best! Thanks again for creating this story! V◕ฺω◕ฺV

Warning: long review. Can I just not only say. Wow. I’m a person who rarely gets hooked into reading a particular webnovel and can easily give up on one quite early for various reasons. Heck, this could be one out of a few novels that kept me reading past 50 chapters, and those are really hard to find (I could probably count them with my fingers). The beginning chapters were honestly somewhat hard to process because of the sea of gorgeous, detailed sentences that were flooding into a set of eyes that were used to skimming through the starting sentences of many, more simply versed stories (not saying those are necessarily bad). That surprisingly turned me off at first, but when I got back to reading more I learned to stop skimming the sentences so much and learned to savor the art of each sentence (if anyone gets to this part of the review this is a piece of advice I offer). Once I did this it was like I was transported into the story and whatever was confusing to me became more comprehensible for my IQ level, if that makes sense...haha... anyway I got hooked and just wanted to express my admiration for the author of this story after staying up til morning reading this gem. You’re my writing inspiration dear author :-)

Dear author, please keep updating, I love it ╰(*°▽°*)╯ The MC and her family together are just too cute, dear passing visitors, please check out this book and give it a try! I feel like the author has the knack for bringing out the adorable-ness in characters, and I love how there is somewhat an aura of mystery in the novel around certain individuals, and a couple pieces are coming together (or deceivingly coming together : 0) to complete the picture. It kept me on my toes and I am definitely looking forward to future updates!

Hello author from a fellow newbie author! I have been writing my own first novel and thought to give some support to any person also starting on their writing journey here. The beginning chapters of your story definitely caught my attention enough for me to look forward to the subsequent chapters :) The format of your story is pretty unique, and it reminded me of acting scripts. I am not sure if other readers will be comfortable reading in this format, but if you wanted it to be that way, so shall it be! If you could describe the the characters' expressions sometimes when they speak and describe more of their appearance, perhaps it could enhance your story more. I wish you well in your writing journey 😊

Overall, the story had an interesting plot and the author's use of words were creative and artful. I loved the female MC's strong and snappy attitude. I think what made the story lose its potential is because there were too many incomplete sentences and too much of the sentences that seemed incoherent to each other. This seems to originally be a Korean novel?? If it is, then the English translation needs a lot of work. Whoever's reading this random review hi I have a novel :')