Matthew_Tompsett - Profile

Its a decent story - the characters have promise - but unlike the foolish review who called him racist character the character does have flaws in his development but none are so jarring as to break the story Basically hoping the author continues this story and develops Ni Wen's tale - and I hope he gets out of the trap of just introducing elements and speeding the story too fast - which tends to be a major flaw in most novels

This story has a lot of potential - and while the grammar is a little off - It's definitely a great read The author kind of dropped things in a little quickly but hey gotta follow the tropes - I figure stuff will get fleshed out as the MC progresses into those areas that are right now a little threadbare Again a good read, the pacing isnt too bad, but author should take into account if he powers up the MC too fast he will need to create greater and greater obstacles and that can cause its own unique problems. But Im a free kinda guy so meh to my opinions - he he

Sadly the author never finished this story - it had a lot of potential - he started jumping a little quickly before he quit the story but its definitely worth a read.