I really enjoyed the creativity of this story. It's a great allegory of the fall of man. I'm very impressed with his word choices. He paints a very vivid picture of the story in such a way that you feel that you're almost watching it on screen. You can also feel the heaviness at the end of this segment. Excellent work!
Congratulations on your official grade! I'm very proud of you Son!
The Cycle of Vinetum: Histories of a Cursed & Conquered World
Fantasy · Joel_West