David_Foote

2yr

Replied to David_Foote

Dimensional Peeing, peeing in any dimension. Dimensional Stewing, eat stew in any dimension. Dimensional Viewing, View in any dimension.

Another ten days later, he replicated Dimensional Peering.

My Special Ability is Perfect Replication

Fantasy · Tuanyuan, The Little Panda

David_Foote

2yr

Commented

Dimensional Peeing? Eeeew

Another ten days later, he replicated Dimensional Peering.

My Special Ability is Perfect Replication

Fantasy · Tuanyuan, The Little Panda

David_Foote

2yr

Commented

And they wonder why resources are so scarce on the his planet

The palace of Fortuna City was absolutely massive. It covered an area of about two million Sq meters and was located right in the middle of the inner city. It was cleanly divided into two parts, one belonged to Princess Mei Yin, and the other to Prince Mei Shu.

The Dawn of the New World

Eastern · Shinigami8671

David_Foote

2yr

Commented

Any kind of clothes? Does that mean they are going there naked? Won't that draw the wrong kind of attention? LOL

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The Bloodline System

Fantasy · TimVic

David_Foote

2yr

Commented

Hey, I really enjoy reading and you have a good style but see a lot of errors, wrong tenses and missing words. I can proofread and edit for you if you are interested. Text me back and let me know.

ch 95 Hellish to Abysmal.

My Space-Time System

Fantasy · xImpulse

David_Foote

2yr

Commented

He isn't in America where you can buy cat food for a dollar or two, or get it cheaper in bulk

Making his own cat food was cheaper, healthier and more nutritious than the typical cat food sold in a pack.

Destiny Online: Halo Paladin

Games · Dark Crow's Starry Whisper

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

No comprende senior lol

"Today is the Auspicious day, today our children going form a bond with their monster that will last said and started the bonding ceremony.

Monster Integration

Fantasy · AnWan

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

This is all just one long sentence. Don't you believe in proper punctuation?

Pulling up outside the ESU gates I take a look around to see where all the students are gravitating towards as that's most likely the place where the party is going down and once I see the brightly lit building near the very back of the ESU grounds with a horde of people on the front lawn socialising I realise that that building is definitely where the party is at and so I drive towards it but I don't park too close to it and park next to a different nearby dorm, when Johnny asks me why I did so I simply explain that I don't want any drunk assholes leaving the party and my car being the first thing they see should they decide to go for a nice piss or a fun spree of vandalism which Johnny showed understanding towards since we just fixed this baby and we wouldn't want her getting damaged so soon.

Swallowing The Spider

Anime & Comics · DragonField

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

Sounds like 30 seconds into swinging from one roof to another it will dissolve and let him fall

The only person I could see her telling that may be able to figure out the formula is Batman. But seeing as we are going to be robbing his alter ego I doubt that he'll give her the time of day, but batman could probably find out the formula from some samples. That's why this batch of web fluid I'm making will be quick dissolving, it will dissolve after thirty seconds and leave no trace.

Swallowing The Spider

Anime & Comics · DragonField

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

Did he cut up the cook? Maybe made a stew from him? I guess that is what happens when you don't cook well you become the next meal.

Lu An, of course, felt unwell, letting Boss cook for him. He wanted to offer himself to cook, but it seemed Boss could read his mind, "It's okay, just this once you will taste my cook!"

Armipotent

Fantasy · HotIce

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

Heero in one sentence Tang in the next.

Wei Peng led Heero to the lobby and invited him to sit on the sofa. As Tang Shaoyang sat down, there was a woman bringing a glass of water and put it in front of Tang Shaoyang.

Armipotent

Fantasy · HotIce

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

I am confused. Why is it your English is fine when you are responding to questions, but horrible when writing the story? If you need someone to edit it and clear up the mistakes I offer my assistance, but I don't understand why you can respond fine and write so badly.

ch 0 8 Destroyer

Armipotent

Fantasy · HotIce

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

shine. When this verb is intransitive, it means “to give or make light”; the past tense is shone {the stars shone dimly}. When it is transitive, it means “to cause to shine”; the past tense is shined {the caterer shined the silver}.

Iaman's eyes shined for a second, but he quickly calmed down.

Death... and me

Fantasy · Suiyan

David_Foote

3yr

Commented

I think either way you can only please about half the readers lol

This of course led to him receiving non stop praise from her that did not cease even when she was almost out of breath as she started to struggle with her push ups past around 800. Moby did not complain and awkwardly accepted all the praise as practice for when he will eventually rule over an entire race of demons as demon lord. Moby also told her that he and Jayden were now dating. And, instead of getting mad or jealous like he feared, she congratulated them instead. Moby was not sure if she just had a really low self-esteem or that she just didn't like him in that sort of way. Either way, his fears of internal love problems and fears of making a harem to appease everyone were put to rest.

The Great Demon System

Fantasy · Drip

David_Foote

3yr

Replied to Bookaholic1

Dummy, it is already dead, so it can be stored

+1,000,000,000 points to the first person who correctly guesses what just happened!

The Great Demon System

Fantasy · Drip

David_Foote

3yr

Replied to ssanstuff

Yeah the question becomes why is he singled out? If he had no abilities because he is poor, he isn't the only poor person here, how can everyone else have abilities but him?