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You are actually really good at writing fight scenes! One of the qualities of a good fight scene, is minimal decription, which you do perfectly. For all those who do not understand I will explain; a poorly written fight scene tries to explain every detail and not allow the readers mind to work. A good fight scene lets the readers mind fill in the gaps. Keep up the great work Author-sama, and have a nice day!

Heyo job hype! Good chapter Author-sama and hope you have a fantastic day!

Thanks for the confirmation! Hyped for academy arc (although this arc is really good and I kinda want it to go on longer), and I’m happy that we can meet some friends, both old and new! Have a great day Author-sama!

TLDR at bottom + Question for Author-sama I haven’t written a comment for a little while, so this shall mark my triumphant return! *clears throat* ahem… This chapter uses the classic idea of “The Hero’s Journey” to showcase where this segment is heading. Specifically it is the “Loss of Innocence” step. Normally it is not taken so litterally, however for how our character is and acts, this is good character development. I personally have always been a fan of Assassin Classed people, so this segment may be biased slightly. Ezio is a very interesting character so far, and also sheds a small amount of light on the leader of Lont, Will’s grandfather. I hope that his assassin training goes well, but that his character doesn’t change too much, otherwise I feel that the story will be disrupted. Overall, this has been a great arc, and some great character development. TLDR: Great arc, Great development, and Looking forward to the next chapters Question for Author-sama: Academy arc yes or no? Just want to meet back up with the girls turned boys at the academy, and some stuff to happen. Keep up the great work Author-sama and have a great day!

Dude that cat is CHILLING! Wish I could chill like that.

I like the idea of a split personality that only comes out in combat. The grammer was good and the chapter was great! Keep up the great work Author-sama and have a great day!

Great work Author-sama! I’ll have to find a use for that quote! 😏

Great chapter Author-sama, allowing the character to be seen vulnerable will make him feel more close to the readers. Keep up the great work and have a good day!

Yeahhhhhhhh! Academy/School arc coming up hype! Is it going to be a classic one, or a new one from Author-dono! We’ll know soon! Keep up the great work Author-dono, and have a great day!

Dang man, that’s a good one, take my like and go!

Well, I wonder whats going to happen next? It seems that we are changing arcs over to training maybe? I hope that he can learn from his mistakes in the duel and improve himself. If he stays as weak and unintelligent as he is now, he will probably die, or people around him will. I’m looking forward to some character development for him, and I hope we still hang out with Est for a while. Keep up the great work Author-dono, and have a great day!