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Lemonbunzz

Lemonbunzz

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Sharing imagination.

2020-09-14 Joined Global

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Lemonbunzz
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YEHHH TELL HER

"Ellie, why are you disguised as a man? You are a breathtaking lady, and your authentic beauty goes unappreciated with your disguise." Erina leaned her head against Elysia's shoulder.

My Goddess is Good at Pretending

My Goddess is Good at Pretending

Fantasy · YuuZu

Lemonbunzz
Commented

WHAT THE-

"It's not impossible. Maybe we need to hold a trade event in the near future. Pay attention to the latest news from the Minamoto Family." Elysia tapped her chin while asking Xentia's opinion via Elysium Group Chat.

My Goddess is Good at Pretending

My Goddess is Good at Pretending

Fantasy · YuuZu

Lemonbunzz
Lemonbunzz
Commented

too many cliches happening in one chapter. 💀

I didn't know what he meant, but my mind wasn't thinking about anything at that moment. All I could feel was the lunar energy coursing my body and the environment.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

Why is he arrogant when he's obviously weak? Literally only plot armor can save you 💀💀

"Are you acting like you don't know me? I thought you were my biggest fan after you attacked me from behind like a coward." I said mockingly, trying to divert all his attention to me and away from my group.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

It's a good one, it's still up to the user if it's gonna be dangerous.

"Memory magic" was extremely dangerous and not something that people should know about its existence. However, I was next to my most trusted friends, so I knew we could keep it a secret.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Posted

Just an early chapters review I really have a mixed feelings about this novel. I mean it's got some potential to be good. You got no grammatical mistakes and it's easy to read. but there's so many things that just really ticks me off. I might change this review as I read more. I feel like the author trying to show something especially the characters but fails just to do so. for example, the author appears to try showing that the mc is matured due to his nature of his reincarnation,perhaps like most other novels of it's type. This is obviously implied the way character say it and obviously his some of his actions. However, on the other side, he is naive and a very childish at times, which is the exact opposite, at least in the early chapters. I hope you get what I mean. The worldbuilding appears really plain, uncreative and there really nothing else to it other than it's a typical medieval-fantasy world with magic, goblins, giant monsters, dragons and pretty much what you would see in the normal fantasy world. It's got no unique monsters, sentient races are the same ol' fairies, elves, humans, dwarves(?). All in all, there's nothing to it. in fact, most the plants and crops are just mundane ones from Earth. Add more to it!! Look at Harry Potter, for example, it's got boggarts, bowtruckles, and nifflers and unique magical plants!! And heck even a dodo bird is actually a magical creature. Your world? (this novel's) we've seen a lot of those and it's boring now. bruhhhhh.... I'm just ranting at this point...It's fantasy novel!.. 😭😭😭 But at least your not bad at showcasing the plain fantasy world. I'm not talking about character development since it's gonna be very long. Other review, mentioned it anyways. The romance aspect in this game is also a very lacking, it really has a great potential but there's nothing literally to really comment on it as it's mostly non-existent in the novel despite the title made it clear that romance would be significant in this story. I feel like it COULD attract romance fans (and only) because of the TITLE but won't be able to retain their loyalty and attention. Anyway, there are so much more to say but I'm tired now. There's a lot of missed opportunities to capture attention and show creativity. Unfortunately, majority are just summarized and scenes that could've been written in a lot more chapters were narrowed down to just a single chapter and even just a few lines. I can guess that there aren't a lot of readers. And author, I hope you don't get mad at this review and you don't mind constructive criticism.

Lemonbunzz
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except the Enemy characters.. probably

"The other option is… death." Vespera finished her explanation.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Lemonbunzz
Commented

sussy Garrett

"He… Didn't want to take part in this…" answered Valentina looking reserved.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

I feels like he's just in denial.

'Huh, when she gets serious like that, she really looks like… 'her.' Wait, what the hell am I thinking?'

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

oh god, I'm already feeling something cringe is about to happen. 🤮

"Huh? Don't think you can order my knights around!" yelled the commander, waving her fist like an angry old woman.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

For what?! They are KNIGHTSS!!!!

"These guys are going there too. Shouldn't we keep them company, just in case?" she asked, her eyes resembling a puppy's.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

decent enough scene but it needs more dialogue. Feels like it's just summarizing again. 😑😑

The princess looked at me, and I noticed a small tear forming under her eyes as she apologized, saying it was her fault I got hurt. However, I wasn't mad at her in the slightest.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

pfft... He legit thinks and acts like an actual child.

He looked at me in shock and switched to a solemn smile. "Have you ever been told you don't act like a kid?" said the commander as I stared at him with an awkward smile.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

He's overthinking

While all that happened, Reinar was one of the few people that could get close to the sick since his skill would cure him if the infection got into his body. But he was just a child and believed it was unfair for him to have such a skill while other people were dying.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

You start with the feet

I didn't know either, and the only place I could think of that could butcher it without a problem was the adventurers guild. However, we couldn't bring our monsters there since we were not registered yet.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

In other words, he lost. such a crybaby.💀💀

Feeling the warmth of the princess and my companions made me cry even more, embracing them all and letting my tears flow out.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

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"Now, shoot!" I yelled as I threw the energy that had accumulated in my hand like a baseball into a massive tree in front of me. However, the power and speed that came from the projectile were completely unexpected, making the star go through several trees that stumbled down one by one before the star's energy dissipated from the air.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

Lemonbunzz
Commented

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The princess radiated such a soothing and positive energy, that I realized how dumb I was for not appreciating our new title. We both had a lot of fun making chocolate, and the princess loved it. The title could have been seen as a prize for having fun, so the fact that I felt dissatisfied with it at first was pretty childish of me.

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

My Wife and I Became Sages in Another World

Fantasy · CaracasM

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