Goren

Goren

3mth

Commented

Why is the heroine switching gender constantly?

ch 0 4 Chapter 4

Before I Died I Forcibly Kissed The Heroine (CP)

Anime & Comics · Satella_Lust

Goren

3mth

Commented

Consept of the story is interesting, but I think you should have written down who of the named characters is talking and thinking, and what their faces were like during those moments.For example, "'Insert character name' was frowning in anger and disgust before being their eyes went wide and their eyebrows shot up in surprise." Simple things like this I think would improve the story a bit more and make the story more readable.If the author reads this comment, then thank you taking the time to read this and I hope I gave good advice.

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Goren

4mth

Commented

Narcissa's two brothers???

Ever since returning to Hogwarts, Narcisa couldn't get her mind off the scenes of her two brothers having their study sessions at the Black mansion.

Harry Potter: Mind Control

Book&Literature · Monk_of_Souls

Goren

5mth

Replied to Goren

Eyes of the Jungle

ch 0 9 The Eye of the Jungle and the Wind of the Oak Tree

A Necromancer Who Just Wants to Plant Trees

Games · The Key In 10 Years

Goren

5mth

Commented

So, the MC gets the 'Eyes of the Forest' skill, but a couple paragraphs after it's now ' Eyes other Jungle'. ?? WHAT ??

ch 0 9 The Eye of the Jungle and the Wind of the Oak Tree

A Necromancer Who Just Wants to Plant Trees

Games · The Key In 10 Years

Goren

5mth

Commented

Wouldn't it be more appropriate to say that the 'APP' would notify him, not the 'SYSTEM'?

ch 0 3 Chapter 3 "A Long Night For Her"

My Heroine Accomplice System (18+)

Anime & Comics · Avalynez

Goren

5mth

Commented

Where did Nick get the "A History of Magic" book? Cause he hasn't gone to Diagon Ally or made a purchase of it through the system's shop.

ch 18 Close call

Harry potter: The ringmaker

Book&Literature · loskro

Goren

5mth

Commented

Hi, I just started reading this so I'm a bit late to this, but you could have Sakura start to train a bit more seriously after all available skills. That way she, like Naruto, will get a better body earlier.

ch 0 6 Plan for Ino (R18)