I really liked the idea of your story. Keep on writing. Most importantly, the dialogues were clear enough to make the reader understand. As this is your first writing, I would say that you did well. Keep on reading and you would do much better. Overall I liked it. Please keep on writing. All the best 😊
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I really liked the idea of your story. Keep on writing. Most importantly, the dialogues were clear enough to make the reader understand. As this is your first writing, I would say that you did well. Keep on reading and you would do much better. Overall I liked it. Please keep on writing. All the best 😊
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Fantasy · Amy_Reason