Webnovel Author: theychimirollin - Novel Collection

Awesome work! It's very well-written and the words just take you. The detail and relationships between characters weren't skimped out on. I'm a huge fan of the fight scenes and I've become a fan of the author as well. Kudos and keep it up! :)

Great job! Celestial beings' interactions with our world always pique my interest. The first chapter was very interesting but as the story went on, and though progressing, it felt a little lost. I hope this comes off as advice to a fellow author but maybe instead of a direct showcase of skills, maybe Liam could be placed in harsher situations where he does learn and use his newfound powers. But maybe that's just me. That said, it was an enjoyable read and it will stay in my collection because I'm curious of Liam's journey and the author's progress as well. You're doing great. Keep it up and keep writing! :)

Thank you! I appreciate the advice and I'll definitely do that! I've been planning to spend a day of proofreading the whole novel soon. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It means a lot to me. Even I was caught unaware of how much I liked the characters lol. I hope to do my best writing on. Thank you again! :)

Thank you! Really glad you enoyed it, especially the humor. I usually write fantasy but like Maya on foreign land, this is my first story with comedy as a centered genre. I'll do my best to keep both humor and story going. :)

Great job! I like the pace and how Travia is more understood as the story goes. Maybe proofreading or reading what you've written aloud could help. There's room for improvement on the technical side but there's a lot of potential in the story. Keep it up and keep writing! :)

Thank you for the kind words. It really means a lot. I was working on the third one-shot but it'll be slower than usual because I'm working on a entirely new novel for the current contest. Hopefully, I can manage so I can finally write the main story. To be honest, I was anxious to see how readers would receive this style of narration. I really appreciate your constructive thoughts about it and I hope I can lessen the confusion in the future. I wish italics were available to us authors. Thoughts would be more obvious and other writing forms could be applied. Thank you again and I wish you the best in your novel as well! (am excited for chapter 4 lol)

Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus. Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another. Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work! **: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)

Thank you! That means a lot to me that it wasn't a difficult read. A few of the characters will be more fleshed out in the main story. If you're interested, the second one-shot is up and it's focused on a different race, the Fellden. It's called Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room :)

Thank you again, SillyRaven! Yep, character backstories and peeks into the involved races of the world. Currently working on the third one-shot and it revolves around the Err-Thak. Hope you'll have the time to read that too :)

Thank you, Camille! I'm happy that you wanted more out of the story too. Hopefully, I'll be able to do that when I start on the main story. But yeah, I'd really like to commission an artist when I can. If you want another peek into the world, the second one-shot is already published and focused on a different race, the Fellden. It's called Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room. Currently working on the third one-shot :) *edited because typo lol

Hi and awesome job! I've only read a few chapters so far but I can't wait to go deeper into the story. I found the pace and build up refreshing for the genre. I'll add to my collection because I'm sure there's more in store for Mael's journey! Thank you for the swap and good luck as well with your work!