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苟在白胡子：被金榜曝光了

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Frankly, it's hard to say ntr, but there's definitely cheating. Ntr usually has sexual intercourse and stealing. Here, Kyle and Helia have been in a relationship for a while. There was no sexual intercourse between them. But there was flirting, kissing and hugging. This is cheating no matter which country's culture and law you look at. The author wrote it well, not as disturbing as ntr novels but still not for me. Cheating is one of my most hated mistakes. In cheating, reasons are just excuses. She was alone, weak, in a difficult situation. These are just excuses to console yourself. Helia admits that she loved Kyle too, when she was about to die. Of course, we can have feelings for more than one person in life. However, this is not an excuse to cheat. If there was a reverse harem or open relationship, it would be more acceptable to me. But cheating is taboo for me. Of course, we should not blame only Helia. Arial himself cheated on Helia. That's why this relationship felt so weak. I don't like drama too much. The novel itself is good. The writing style of the author is very good. However, this novel is not for me. For me, the most important elements in the novel are; plots and relationships. That's why I wasn't too attached to this novel. However, the author did a good job. I would recommend reading it to anyone who is not bothered by it.

I liked author's other work. Hp fanfic is one of the fanfic I like. Overall the author did a good job. I didn't like only two parts of the novel. The first is Mc's character. Mc says he wants to hide his strength and be low-key until he finishes school, but more than once he makes big moves in situations that don't concern him. Frankly, Mc gave me the impression of a sociopath. I think Mc is someone who likes to attract attention and be praised. His secret actions show this. While supposed to be the so-called magic nerd, Mc is constantly interfering with events unrelated to him, increasing the risk of being caught. Secondly, it is used not in this novel but in other novels in a way that I cannot understand. Paranoid Dumbledore. It first used it in a fanfic, but after that, for some reason, everyone accepted that Dumbledore is a paranoid senile person. In every fanfic, Dumbledore acts stupidly thinking that the MC of the novel will be the new dark lord. Dumbledore is portrayed as a manipulator in the Harry Potter books, I agree. But in the books, Dumbledore showed no signs of paranoia whatsoever. Fanfic writers have it. They always make a few characters stupid and obsessed with the Mc for no reason. Dumbledore, Danzo, Nick Fury these were especially used a lot. These people have held high positions for decades, planning a conspiracy is equivalent to breathing for them. But for some reason they turn stupid when they meet our 20 year old nerd Mc. They constantly attack him for no reason. I only said this to clear my heart out a bit though. The author did good job at this. Frankly, he reflected Dumbledore in my head pretty well. This Dumbledore is not paranoid, but he is a manipulator. He did not forget to use his brain like other writers Dumbledores. He is slowly revealing MC secrets. I don't know what he's planning, but as any intelligent person would, he won't act until he has gathered enough information. My second complaint is Mc's unprovoked paranoia rather than the author's portrayal of Dumbledore's character. However, MC is highly likeable apart from these two flaws. The side characters are pretty well reflected. I'm waiting for the rest. I hope this book finish. P.S When will love interest be announced?

Overall nice. Pros -Mc has a good personality. -Mc joining the main characters is a plus for me. Others may not like it, but I enjoyed it that way. There are a lot of op or evil mc fanfic. If this is not for their taste, they can read them. There is no need to bother the author too much and make him drop it. -I like romance but cringe love isn't suit One piece fanfics. So I like his choose of partner. Cons -The author doesn't know about power scale. Sometimes mc looks strong but most of the time he has a hard time against weak opponents. He has 3 tomoe sharingan but never use genjutsu. Frankly, I don't think they can get rid of genjutsu without haki in one piece. Some will say, he doesn't have mangekyou, but 3 tomoe sharingan is more than enough to get someone who doesn't know how to use chakra to genjutsu. He knows more than one s rank ninjutsu but he is still too weak. I think the S rank jutsus at least matching admiral's full force attack. I hate nerfing. If you going to go nerf mc than don't give him that power. I don't mind him being not stronger than luffy but at least make it logical. When he gets mangekyou logicaly he should be at least as strong as strong vice admirals if not stronger but now you make him this weak; he probably end up at most rear admiral level. I hope you fix it.

I usually don't comment, but because I like your story, I thought I should express my opinion. Sometimes the things you wrote feel so forced. You should stop doing it. Because it makes it really difficult to read. She isn't Harry Potter things will not develop same way they have diffirent they have different circumstances. 1. Boyfriend rumours. İt feel too forced. She is cold looking person. She wasn't act close to any boy. It isn't logical such rumours to be accepted. Anyone with brain could see it was just ill act. 2. She isn't Harry Potter she doesn't cause trouble to others, there is no reason to somedoy act against her. She is top student okay but she isn't great beauty or chosen one like HP, There wasn't any reason for jealousy . And she doesn't pick fight with other so hatred also not logical. 3. Triwizard arc first Severus just lost his grandmother and father it was too illogical to risk Rowan life even if ones in million chance. Second this sentence 'it must have been three founders blood rowan possesed that best candicates ignored by goblet.' I mean she is young I agree but still she manages pass exam equal to NEWT how the heck she isn't one of the best candicate. And she pass it with good marks. And with Prince' current power it is illogical everybody pick a fight with them. Their grandfather become sort of faction leader, they are students of one of the strongest wizard and that wizard is headmaster, they are genius who passed the exam youngest since 300 years, and they have decent character. Who wanna pick a fight with them? Do not misunderstand. I'm not saying the story is bad. On the contrary, I felt the need to state this bad habit because it was good. Apart from what I wrote, I think it went really well. You are writing one of the best HP fanficts, in my opinion, hope you can make it even better.