Tim_Persons - Profile

I liked the first chapter and I could see how much thought was put in it. And I hoped that the author would be committed to the rewrite.If your commitments and responsibilities keep you from writing it is understandable but not to have a laid back attitude. I hope you will put in the effort and maintain your passion for this rewrite.Most writers loose interest midway, or run out of ideas

I'm not a fan of rewrites but with this chapter you have convinced me.

The effort you spent was well worth it. With this chapter you were brilliant.

Good stuff. Keep it up.

In spite of his circumstances he is at leisure not understanding the importance of strength.

Even though the MC is young and afraid of envy, he is like a man saving for a rainy day instead of investing. He could level the meditation skill and his endurance created skills sure as Learn, adapt, calm or even situation assessment instead of being passive.

By learning and assimilating all the laws the MC benefited a great deal so Author delay no further and let him do same with the lesser and grand daos.

The release rate is slow but the plot is not bad at all.

Great story. Keep up the good work.

let the MC not forget to create the skill supreme Dao travester a skill that will that would enable him to learn the lesser daos and the grand daos, costing 100,000000 .

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

And MC should also learn crafting from the Dwarfs. He can claim that he would only use a blade that has been forged by himself. A good answer if Odin should ask. And if the Dwarfs refuse, tell them their fates and how their entire civilization is bound to be destroyed, promise to save as many of them as he can when the time comes for all that they know about crafting, forging and building.

Perhaps MC should use the Eternal Fire, the Reality, Power, and Space stones in a Ritual to remold his Divinity, Magic and his body. The Eternal Fire is in Asgard, the Space Stone is in Norway. The other two can be tracked with the Space Stone and use illusions to replace the power stone in the Nova Empire. The energy from the stones and the flame should be better than vita rays and might give him reality warping powers especially if Ms Death contributes.

What is the difference between the Ancient One and Charles Xavier or even Nick Fury? Each of these fellows like control, spying on others, giving the speech, playing the mentor, then recruiting you for the greater good. Any MC with an ounce of sense knows not to sign up on their crusade no matter what format they use.

Is the MC foolish or something? Instead of living an unfeathered life and walking his own path, for such a little gain he has placed his life in the hands of another.

The MC has a system so why not level up his skills, instead of focusing solely on his character's level. The MC can becomes crazily good in battle and secretly proficient in sorcery.