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Thats the main issue holding back this fanfic, way too much changing povs and staying with secondary characters.

Everything is top notch, wether it is world buidling, writing quality, story flow and developement. I will say that updates are too slow. The only damn thing holding this back is the tedious amount of POVs. At the start it was pretty good as a good majority of the story was on the mc with some POV changes to give the story more diversity and life. BUT GAD DAMNNN BRO, its getting ridiculous now, I swear that for 10 chapters we get around 2-3 chapters for the MC. Like what?? I’m not here to read about those random kids story, this shit is making me dislike them (I dont mind pov changes to their perspective but not this much). Please author, focus more on the mc, we want to see how he schemes his way back to the top, the impact he will make on the Gu world, his legacy, proper things. Man, the fanfic is actually good tho, just so disappointed with the author’s way of storytelling. Anyway if what I said doesn’t bother you in the slightest, read the story, you’ll enjoy it plenty.

A pretty good story overall, unfortunately quite the amount of grammar mistakes, thought it isn’t to the point of being unreadable, but still distracts a bit from the reading. The universe and world building is pretty interesting and as I was reading I wanted to know more of the races, planets and general lore of this universe. The system is a mixed bag for me, the main issue being that its not expained enough, like why does it detoxify all poisons? why does it reject every mental abilities that is used on the mc? those advantages make the system at times feel too op for no reason at all, which substract from the enjoyment of this story. For me what made me stop reading this story, is the fake villainous mc for me ( there is poison in the story at times). Id say he is more of a very dark anti-hero than a villain. small spoilers ahead: Like the point that made me drop the story is that a gladiator that betrayed him earlier in the story dies later on, but because the death wasn’t honorable enough (like wtf? Seriously thats the reason hes mad??) he gets mad at the ennemy and wants to take revenge. Or that earlier in the story he saves a group of people because it wouldn’t pose an issue to him. Certain actions of him made me question each time if he truly is a self-centered villain or juste a very twisted anti-hero. Anyway the story isn’t bad per se, just disappointing at times. Read if everything I said wouldn’t bother you.

I shall bestow upon my fellow daoist a rank 5 mortal gu.