Yon_Wellei - Profile

dont worry about it, as you said it yourself it is your first ff and i do believe that you have the skills to write a good one, you just have to be a bit more brave when it comes to changing the original.

First off i would like to point out that english is not my native language so forgive me if i spell or write something wrong. Having said that, i have not seen any grammar or spelling mistake so far in the ff, the mc is kinda ok but ultimately very bland due to the fact that we know nothing about him other than him being a reincarnator. He was never really described and the only thing we know about his personality is what we can infer from his actions. Another thing that really bothers me (and really my main problem with this fanfic) is that it is just a recapitulation of the movie, nothing changes except for hiccups gender, the mc doesnt interact with anyone other than hiccup, nobody seems to ever talk about or to him and he just kind of tags along to whatever hiccup does, i would also like to point out that some interactions that he has with hiccup are straight out just things hiccup did with astrid in the movie (ex: the part where they ride together for the first time). Sorry for the long rant but i was kinda dissapointed that the first fanfic i found of httyd ended up being just a rewrite of the original.

although shorth, it is the best ff of dc i've read so far.