I love writing, but more than anything I love entertaining people. Creating stories for books or games has always been my passion. I'm always open for constructive criticism .
2020-10-28 Joined Mexico
repetitive...
Her feet were indeed bare, as the discussions had said, and she was not wearing any shoes.
Fantasy · Laughter and Joy
Dressed in furniture? like Slighorn in HP?
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Teen · Nebula18457
This line just blew my mind. I was sure I was reading a normal fic until BOOM! have you seen Glass?
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Teen · Tailrs ink
I'll work on my descriptions for the third part :D
Broth rights! No soup for anyone until they're given their rights!
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Urban · foxyash
I couldn't have said it better myself. Thank you for your review!
Thanks! *pops lolipop in mouth*
ch 0 1 1st Arc: Rebirth of Shen Mu
Eastern · Kumitzin
The more our country will suffer from this
"How much longer will the hunters show up!? The longer they come here, the bigger our country will suffer from this!"
Fantasy · Phantomfiend
Eyes with shoes, that's new
"A new… element?" asked Benladann, her eyes shoed confusion and a bit of frustration.
Fantasy · PancakesWitch
How can it carry 3 wolves of it's a bit over a meter long? Two chapters before it said that it was a "meter and a few centimeters long"
Now that I am this big it's rather easy to carry these corpses.
Fantasy · PancakesWitch
You were absolutely right, it's now corrected. Thanks!
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Fantasy · Kumitzin
You are most welcome
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Fantasy · Kumitzin
Overall it's a good story, but it needs work, especially from a native-english proofreader. I'll revise once that happens.
Summoner: Monster Girl Harem!
Fantasy · Duke_Asmodeus