I've only gotten to chapter 5 so far, but I'm enjoying the story so far. There are a few things, though. From what I read, the character designs aren't mentioned in the story at all, so you've really gotta imagine what they look like. I'm also kinda iffy on the antagonist's plan being layer out from the start. I feel like it should have been more mysterious, with context clues leading the reader to draw a conclusion until the big reveal ties it all together. Besides that, the story is going at a pretty good pace, keep this up and improve those things, and it should be good!
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I've only gotten to chapter 5 so far, but I'm enjoying the story so far. There are a few things, though. From what I read, the character designs aren't mentioned in the story at all, so you've really gotta imagine what they look like. I'm also kinda iffy on the antagonist's plan being layer out from the start. I feel like it should have been more mysterious, with context clues leading the reader to draw a conclusion until the big reveal ties it all together. Besides that, the story is going at a pretty good pace, keep this up and improve those things, and it should be good!
Book One: Overcoming The Power Within
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