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sorry about the lateness of the reply, my notifications have not really worked except when I'm on PC, which I'm not usually on. I don't have a problem with the brakes and the constant action dose get on my nerves but if a brake in action happens SHOW IT and vice versa, if the hero would see this now if they would not see or know about it its up to you if you wish to show such. butt when you time skip and give some one scars and they moved half a continent doing things and this is described in a foot note fashion after a sudden time skip with no explanation it really kills it for me. you will know after chapter like 50 is where the issues are, before this is good writing.

honestly the start of the story is good. it had potential with well described characters, interesting back ground and diverse ways of telling things. this ends after you need to pay to view. it does not one but two or three time skips while there were event that could and did at points transpire ruining the pacing and growth of the MC. at that point started to loose interest and then the pacing gets quicker less story is actually told. the main people are killed off with out a second thought with very little reason to do so, with varrrry little interaction before the next time skip as though they never were there.

i deleted my previous review because i thought it didn't properly articulate my thoughts and it was in the early stages of reading this book. having now gotten some more up dates i can say this writer deserves applause for his story writing and forming. the OP character is there but not bland and boring, there are stop gaps showing he might be strong but not omnipotent. there is so much depth where there are things going on much grater than even him making him look like an ant in the worlds view and its grate. even his powerful moves aren't silver bullets but used right make a grate effective tool in his belt. the humor is always on point and you can never tell wear he is going to take the story next. all and all even if my day has been really bad just this story getting updated make it a good one that's how much i love it and how good it is. now why you reading this and not starting this story already.