Webnovel Author: NightClouds - Novel Collection

As of CH 23: Other than a few typos, the story is very captivating. The characters do feel a little cliche at times but that is often unavoidable and does not take any from the beauty of the story. I like the pacing and certain lines in the story. (Check your vocabulary through!) It has great potential and I'm sure that as you get more comfortable writing, words will flow better. :)

As of CH 14: Very interesting topic! The characters are all so lively and feel like they all play a role in the story! Grammer issues are very minimal so kudos on that! Only thing would be show more, tell less and more sentence(length) variety. That way the story is more flowy :) Overall, love the idea! Although some people may think that the beginning chapters are very choppy, I actually like them since it represents the MC's mental state where everything is confusing and he doesn't understand! Adds flavor!

As of CH 34: So, so interesting! The story of NPCs and a player oohhh. Plus the fairytales tie in...ohhhh Ok, so it's really really good. The story does have some grammar flaws, just things such as plurals, modifiers, etc. Notably, less near the end. (Yay! Improvement <3)Some sentences should have a bit more clarification. The POV switch does confuse me sometimes but probably because I got really interested in the other POV. Great immersion. The world-building is nice and the characters really do have their own personalities :) Overall a recommended read! Great Job.

Anytime. Editing is always good! I'm glad to see you improving <3

Ok, here is my review as of CH 6. Very interesting story. Character Design is decent, and I love the modern incorporations. Seeing the MC's likes and thoughts being relatable is 100% a plus! Some statements really stick with me so great job! Now, the major issue is the grammar. As other reviewers have most likely stated, Grammarly is your best friend. (It is trust me. I'm not the best at grammar but Grammarly is always on for me. This review was written with Grammarly haha!) I'm sure that you will improve and this story certainly has potential. Go Go go! Good luck!

Hello, here is my honest review as of CH 27. First off, the story is beautiful. Not in the sense of refreshing content, but rather in its vivid language. The immersion level is high and each character/place feels alive. It does use common tropes seen in web novels but does not cause it to feel like a mishmash patchwork of plot points. The world-building is *chef's kiss*. Each area that Alex travels through can be easily imagined. The cast of characters all have their own personalities and are not 1-D plot points. However, there are some parts needed for improvement(from an editing standpoint). As wonderful as the story's world-building is, parts can be cut out. Descriptions of places are long and honestly, sometimes, strenuous to read. Show not tell, but don't show everything. There is also a lot of run-on in the beginning chapters of the story. Sentence length should be varied for better flow. Also, although the writing style is more casual, try to use less "you" if possible. It breaks immersion if utilized too often. These are just my advice from an editing viewpoint but overall the story is interesting! The later chapters display clear improvement. Would recommend this story so definitely check it out! :)