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So far the book is good, the writing quality is great, and I always enjoy a strong female protagonist. It's a bit cliche on the plot points so far, but our MC is refreshing with her humor and not the typical cold, ruthless secret agent transmigrator stereotype. Some of the other antagonistic characters personalitys are a bit too extreme though, a little more subtlety would make the flow better, in my opinion. The white lotus characters break their character settings a little too fast.

I just checked the Playstore, there is also a Grammarly keyboard app. I haven't used it before, but if you write from your phone it may help.

Grammarly can be added onto Chrome as a browser extension. It will catch things, like spelling errors, as you type while using the browser. You can also go to the website directly, open up a new blank document, and write there. It gives you more indepth grammar suggestions and corrections. A previous professor of mine recommends it to her students, as she's a horrible speller. 😆

I have really enjoyed the story so far as the concept and world design are unique and interesting. The story can be a little confusing in the beginning as a lot of terms were mentioned without much explanation. An example is how the markings work. You end up spending a lot of time guessing what a lot of it means. It can also be confusing with how some of the characters are connected. A very memorable revelation happened in the very beginning with Dae, and then it's like our MC has completely forgotten the knowledge she became aware of. It is unusual based on her character design that she would just feign ignorance, when she confronts almost everything else head on. The writing quality of this story is definitely on the higher end, compared to a lot of the stories on this website. However, there are some confusing grammar issues at the beginning, where it switches from 1st person to 3rd person perspective, then back again in one paragraph. Also, the paragraphs tend to be exceedingly long at times, with the sentences running together. I love all of the details and the spelling is usually spot on, but the run-on sentences can be distracting. I think if the sentences were broken up a little more, with a reduction in the paragraph sizes, this story would be fantastic. I normally don't write reviews, but I think this story has great potential therefore I wanted to comment. I frequently use an app called Grammarly for my college classes, if you don't have an editor it can substitute as a free one. Thank you for providing everyone with a great story, I look forward to diving deeper into the chapters. Great work!