Overall loving this chapter and the leadup to the battle. Just having a hard time keeping track of space and direction in the dungeon. Just thinking along the lines of how he is hearding all these skeletons to the adventurer group and they are not breaking off down other halls. In no way a detriment to the chapter overall just a thought.
ch 23 Mobbed
Fantasy · Pwnzer
These sort of mission start chapters are always satisfying.
ch 0 6 Taking Action!
Games · Qi Peijia
I do love this sort of political intrigue. Not saying that the story should become this or anything, as I more expect it to focus on the power and combat, but I do love when things like this are sprinkled in.
ch 37 A High-Ranking Person Is Looking After Me
Sci-fi · The Final Fool
Honestly don't know how I feel about Xiao Lin coming forward about Gu Xiaoyue's lifespan here. On the one hand I feel like it is better character wise to not have him hold the secret and make some plot point about how he is keeping secrets from her but on the other hand the way it plays out makes her feel closer to Xiao Lin than they probably are at this point. Could also be that Gu Xiaoyue's cold demeanor does not come out enough here to make her seem like she put back on the mask to cover up how she feels about Xiao Lin knowing her lifespan though.
ch 20 Orcs
Sci-fi · The Final Fool
Now I know to avoid every paragraph that mentions games, because someone will comment this.
Xiao Lin slammed the mouse under his hand on the table, and his frustration was reflected on the monitor. This was his fifth loss of the game tonight.
Sci-fi · The Final Fool
I love the fact that the system actually went so far as to give him metrics on how likely he was to die with his class' power rating. Really just a perfect touch.
ch 12 F-Class Bird Food
World Shatter
Urban · Gulags