Yeah make auxiliary pages I think they will help understand basic things also I would say try adding things like a character proclaimed this or said this or asked or a character shouted after they talk so we know how they feel other than that this has a lot of potential keep up
done everything is reedited
"I immediately left to go see what had happened and took the a fleet with me. Once we got there, I saw something that struck a pain down my chest; fire crossed the sands, and the bodies burnt to a crisp…" Commander Benkei looked dead in the eyes of the emperor who's expression changed to be concerned.
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all corrected dont worry all reedited now
"But.. but that's the thing sir they have.. and they're all dead.. " The solider looked to the ground
Fantasy · N_0_X
lol
"Incredibly deep, we can't even see inside of this hole. It could lead all the way to Hell as far as we know." The solider splurged out
Fantasy · N_0_X
true sorry bout that its a habit lol
Life and Death (Chapter 1)
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Thank you so much I will keep pushing to create a masterpiece
Thanks i really appreciate it i will continue and get to the top thank you so much
Thanks for the review i really am gonna try the next arc after this is gonna be so good
This is better I understand a bit better now
ch 0 -4 Kabuki class (Session 1) "The concept of a soul"
Kabuki Kai
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